I Won't Die!

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Description

Rama Leeroy had been chosen by a deity to get summoned to another world. In order for it to happen, he'd have to die in his old one. Unfortunately for the deity, Rama has no intention of dying.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: Majorian

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 23
Views: 14,121

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Community Reviews(5)

NatarajaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is a great story, the basic idea as well as the execution is great. The only problem is the dialogues which are a bit heavy and can discourage to continue following the story. They really lack stakes and could be shortened by half and interspersed with the characters' reflections.
- Style & Grammar
This is very well written, no grammar, syntax nor style issues. The layout is good which makes the text pleasant to read. The dialogues are quite bad tho. English is not my native language, so I may have missed some things...
- Story
The blurb makes you want to read the story, I was immediately hooked! The MC jumps a little quickly to the idea that someone was trying to kill him however, making him believe at first that it was an accident would have helped to build the suspense. Also, the situation in the other world could be more developed beyond a "simple" invasion, it would have been better if there was something extraordinary that explains why the king couldn't manage on his own.
- Character
The character's love of martial arts and video games immediately sets up his character and makes him interesting. His martial arts practice could be more developed, especially at the beginning, that would make him even more likable! The secondary characters are good too, his buddy, Sifu the teacher :)
S.N. KeirsteadRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Style: Some of the paragraphs stretch on for a while, making certain sections a bit difficult to go over but nothing overbearing. The rest of the writing is simple and straightforward to read.
Grammar: Noticed a handful of typos throughout the story, but again, it's nothing that will leave you questioning what the author meant.
Story: By far the best part of I Won't Die! The author turns the idea of dying and getting reincarnated totally on its head. It verges on parody but takes itself seriously when it needs to. Imagine someone trying not to die to avoid getting isekai'd. That's the main premise of this story and it works well. Assassins. Vehicles. Falling construction equipment. They're all out to get the MC.
Characters: The characers are fun! They are a bit on the funny side but Rama and his friends have their moments of coolness and toughness. They're all in high school, so expect dialogue and mannerisms that fit that demographic. The enemies have their own personalities and abilities as well, making for a diverse and entertaining cast all around.
Definite recommend. Especially if you're a fan of Bruce Lee! It's funny, action packed and has a lot of potential.
Slifer274Royal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
I always review not just off of how mechanically well something is constructed, but also my own personal enjoyment. There’s quite a few mechanical flaws with this fiction, I’m not gonna lie, and it could use some editing, but it’s a very fun story to read.
Very interesting concept, just needs some work on the execution of the less action-focused parts.
Style: 4/5 Could use some work. There’s a lot of usage of passive voice (“The X was doing Y…”). The language is a little simplistic for much of the story, and a decent chunk of the prose doesn’t flow very well, resulting in scenes where we are told what is happened but we’re missing the visceral descriptions of the event. There’s also some slight changing of POVs at some point to give us information, which kinda throws me off (this is especially prevalent when meeting Josephine). It does, at least, convey what is happening well, which is better than what a number of fictions on this site have. Also, the fight scenes improve with time. This was on the border between 3.5 and 4, but the solid quality of fights bumped it up just a little bit. With a little editing, this score could easily be bumped up further.
Story: 5/5 I really like the concept of a bunch of people coming to the real world to steal their isekai savior away from his life. Lots of ass-kicking involved, and I’m excited to see more.
Grammar: 4.5/5 Missing a lot of commas, especially in dialogue. Missing a number of periods, especially in dialogue. Basically all my problems are with dialogue punctuation, to be honest. Apart from that, spelling issues were dealt with quickly and the rest was pretty solid.
Character: 4.5/5 The main characters are a little tropey, but the fic leans into it pretty hard. Do not come here for excellent character writing— you get what’s on the cover. A whole lot of ass kicking and a bunch of characters who are willing to kick ass.
wordsinalineRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I won't die started (as far as I understand it) as a gimmicky writing prompt. But, the author did a great job of it, and readers have been having a lot of fun with the resulting story, so now it's expanded into a proper fiction.
Frankly, I think the original Isekai-accident survivor gimmick gets a little underbaked in favor of fantasy fun-fights. But the villain of the week characters are distinctive, their sequences are well staged, and the action is smoothly and kinetically choreographed.
The throughline of the story though, is the goofy characterization of the MC and his friends. It's comedic, it's coming of age, and it's very much about positive brotherhood. So yea, in a way, the dynamic is far more like a Buddy Comedy than a kung-fu fantasy.
Style: Is good. Strong fights. Nice scene staging.
Grammar: Grammar is kind of on a weird borderline. Mostly it's pretty good, nothing structural really needs to change. But the author has a problem with dialogue punctuation. It seems to be a recurring issue, and will be utterly resolvable.
Story: There's some softness here, in that the parallel world started off as a bit of an afterthought to Rama's Earth experience. It will fill in over time though, I'm sure. The story is most interested in giving us our fights, and setting up our characters, so the plot feels a bit secondary.
Characters: I can't decide whether I hate them or like them. Lovable dipshits. I will say though, that the characterization is probably the strongest part of the story. I know who everyone is, I remember all of the character's names. I understand what kind of people they are.
That's very good work.
woseRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I am prefacing this review by saying that I don't like the isekai genre; I have also NEVER read a deconstruction of the genre that I liked.
Until this one. I won't Die! starts off a little slow and the premise momentarily worried me that it would run out of steam but the author maintains a good balance betwee high octane action and goofiness. Some jokes and dialogue fail to land sometimes because of a lack of snappiness but it is a hard skill to master and I trust the author will get there soon.
The only weak point in the story for me where the other world fantas sections which, while well developed, were a considerable departure from the overall style. While I appreciate the juxtaposition it just wasn't for me but maybe I will change my.mind yet.