he day my father took me to see "Back to the Future" I realized that maybe I wasn't in a confused dream and was in fact in a new life. english versión.

Disclaimer: Everything described in this series is science fiction

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★ 0.5

Like the title says.
Its readable, the format is just annoying.
Dont use >> too, RR allows indents you know.
Dont use I when when its not the mc talking, its obviously the grandmother.
Why her grandma? Did the mc suddenly turn into a girl? Confused at chapter 2, thats a first.
Either you dont know spacing or thats a dialogue in a middle of a paragraph. Oh god use grammarly or something.
Comments are blocked too, first time I've seen one in RR.
I'll add more as I go.
Still not fifty words? How about now?
Nope, still a long way to go.
The kid's words are kinda weird too, its a bit verbose
Not worth reading.
The story is bare bones
MC is a cardboard. Side characters even more. Their interactions are rigid, almost emotionless. Only acts out for set routines.
The mc's cheat is garbage, nothing is explained. The stat growth is neglible because it doesnt affect the mc at all. Basically a memory store to buy stories with a massive dose of wand waving.
Its a shitty story that can only pull out big names.

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