Haven in a Dangerous World (Old)

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Devin McMullen. Female. 18. Single dad. Dead mom. Good in fights and little else. No friends.

Or, at least, that's what she's always been. Now, she's not sure exactly what she is. She's never been one for reading fiction, or anything for that matter, but this feels like something straight out of a fantasy. Her newly acquired instincts, however, screamdungeon core. Whatever that is. Unlike most dungeon cores, though, she's missing something very important. A dungeon. Stuck out in the open, above ground where she's definitelynotsupposed to be, with not a cave in sight, or any other land form besides miles and miles of ice and snow, Devin's not sure if she can survive.

Update: Big caveate, though, just so you know. Started with this one idea and ran with it as far as I could. Characters and plot suffer from it, but I'm proud that I wrote as much as I did. I will rewrite this at some point and make it so it actually has plot.

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: koallary

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Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 1,218
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Community Reviews(10)

krunrRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Love the way the story is going . Flows smoothly with just the right but of humor in it . Can't wait to read more. Keep up with the good work.
MezoRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I'm a big fan of dungeon stories an this one has a good and unique start I look forward to what comes next
RingostraussRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Love the story combines favorite aspects of multiple other stories I've ready while being a unique gem on it's own. In brief you could expand the part right before the dungeon found out it was unique and rapidly expanded the power level. The only reason I say this is not because you need to or the story needs it but I think it it is an area you could expand that would be fun if you decide to sell this on Kindle Unlimited. You get paid by the page read there. Having fun reading this thank you for your hard work.
CandyAddictRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Spoiler Free Review:
This story combines aspects of other popular works on RRL like 'Legend of Randidly Ghosthound' and 'The New World' to create a great addition to the LitRPG dungeon core genre. It has a more realistic and unique start that is able to quickly draw readers in. The world building is well done and hints at a greater plot, the leveling is unique, and the flavor text is interesting. The quotes at the beginning of every chapter are probably one of my favorite things.
The writing itself is well done, with little to no gramatical issues. The author is able to create distinct characters who all act and speak differently. The protagonist also acts as one would expect of someone who doesn't play video games/know min-maxing rpgs.
The only issue I have at the moment (as of ch. 2.2) is that the protagonist's personality doesn't seem to grow much, and that her personality seems to be alot weaker than it should be (as seen in ch 1).
GreatazuredragonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This was an interesting story.
You picked a known story premisse, being reborn as a dungeon, and gave it a refreshing new spin.
Hope you update soon.
John Michael LawRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
It's a good story with good character development. Typical dungeon book type plot.
MezhanosRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Dungeon stories are something that we have all seen countless times yet " Haven in a dangerous world " is quite different from the normal dungeon stories. You have the lovable MC Haven who wants to just build a home to feel safe in the perilous environment she has been left in.
There arent that many chapters as of yet but the story pacing is qiute good. Honestly there isnt much I can nitpick about and all I can say is jus give it a go. It is a really nice fiction.
VarionRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This story shows a clear lack of direction from about halfway through, including the author asking the readers for a direction. This isn't all bad, since we got a fairly decent fiction out of it, but it hurts the story more and more as it goes along.
One issue is a lack of strong characters surrounding the MC. The MC is a well developed character, but she doesn't develop any close ties. Another issue is the general failure to obey any dungeon tropes. That could have been a good thing, and I liked the idea of wonders, but at the same time it robbed the story of even the little bit of direction that following those tropes would allow.
All in all, it's a good try, but I'm inclined to tell the author to grab what they liked from this story, scrap it, and write something new with a better chance of reaching completion.
MoretaRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
It's quite good read as to watch person writing himself into point at which only writing major divine intervention can keep story going. And using something of this caliber would kill story anyways.
It's generally not bad story, just one that is made to be short and with tragic end for everyone.
I would postulate author to lease existing story in place, as this is piece of curio which might turn beneficial for other beginner writers. The rewrite of story might be also good, as separate story, for the same reason, as possibility to point to those two as tangible example how to avoid creating prrmis in way which would be destructive for story (but probably still bad one for the "handling stakes" lesson)
AstolfoMyWaifuRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
This story ... well it was ok at the start MC is a girl , Who died and reincarneted in a different world with 6% of her memories ... well when did the story go downhill i wonder
Spoiler: Spoiler
Is it because of the MC vs World .. No the idea was pretty interesting and new to a light novel . Was it because MC was weak / strong at the same time ... No i think the mc was okay as a character .. the thing i wanted to give up this story is propably because of the naive MC she could become stronger than others and that ruined her . What i mean is the author wanted to make a naive character (Propably and develope it from there) I can't say if this is what he wanted to achieve but the mc is straight up an idiot . 3 year old mentality , another mistake is propably the conversations and the personality of the antagonist the antagonist personality was stupid straight up stupid what i mean with that he had no brain ... not naive just the brain wasn't fuctioning and the conversations was kinda dead (0 comedy just casual conversation between a teacher and a student .. : Hello teacher , hello john end of conversation (kinda dead right) . I mean the story was badly executed but it was passable to the point of reading it in spare time. Wouldn't recommend this to dungeon lovers go somewhere else