Harvest Factory ~ a Farmer Life

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Description

A story about a boy with talents in both farming and cooking. Follow him in his journey of cultivating rare and legendary fauna and flora while cultivating his strength in the side.

" little brother, what's that thing you're eating? "" Jade Crocodile sausage. "" isn't that a rare beast only found in Azure Swamp?! how did you get it?! "" I raised it. "" what's that you're drinking? "" Golden Snow Pear juice. "" ..... did you raise it too? "" un. "

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2019
Author: Fluffas

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Rating: 4.2/ 5.0
Followers: 125
Views: 67,035

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Community Reviews(4)

RoxtRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The title immediately brought to mind Harvest Moon and Rune Factory, with that kind of image in mind its kind of surprising that I'm not disappointed with the results. Give it a read.
DksDarkstriderRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Nice and interesting take on the Xianxia genre, the focus on farming is especially nice to me who loves stardew valley type games.
Few spelling and grammar errors here and there but already theres inprovement.
The story has a lot of potential and if it keeps going as it currently is, there's a great story to be uncovered.
Please keep up the good work. I would recomend this.
Osamaru TaRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Decent story, but needs an editor. Granted, I 've not read far, so they author might get better as time goes on, but even still.
swingguy0Royal Road
★★ 2.0
This story has great potential for a new take on a cultivation story. I want to give some constructive feedback but I don't want to hamper the author from completing the story. First drafts are always shaky. The important thing is to get them out on the page--then revision can be done afterwards.
What I struggled to gain was a strong feeling of what the MC deeply desires, which is what drives a story forwards. Some stories take a bit before something happens that begins the MC onto the path he will take, but I think the bones are there in what we have. From the first few paragraphs you realize he's managing the farm alone and this creates a small bit of mystery, but the reader is left unclear about whether this affects the MC.
Clearly the main character is passionate about eating and cooking delicious food. it already seems a motivating force for the MC but although the details of seeking, preparing, and eating the food are there, the motivation is not stated. Already there is an aspect to his power that lets him grow Qi-enriched foods, but perhaps his delicious experiences with high-Qi foods could improve him? Not that he needs to gain power from food in order to desire it.
Later, the MC talks rarely about how he wants to find his parents or find out what happened, or learn about the arrays around the home, however it's just given as a quick side-thought. From what I read it was hard to feel that this was a driving force for the MC.
So keep writing the first draft and don't let anything stop you. When it comes time for revision consider plot as an important place to restructure. Next, character has some good start but most are 1-dimensional. Afterwards, dialogue was something that I basically scanned and skipped as fast as possible as it detracted from the story as is.
Great attempt and keep writing!