Grand Adventure

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The Supreme pure blood Vampire is bored by his eternal life on earth, constantly being shoe licked by what he calls"""" lesser Vampire scum"""" , he longs for exitement in his life. Well, he could drink blood allday but being a supreme pure blood Vampire he doesn't need to drink blood and can walk in broad daylight without being charred to a pile of coal, he could conquer earth and enslave humanity but he did that all and doesn't care about the humans anymore. So what will happen when he gets an offer, that will change his life and departs to a world with swords and magic.Hello, guys this is my first fiction and english is not my native language so forgive when i make some mistakes .This storys MC will be OP and i will describe the blood and gore the best i can.[+18]Mature Content will be in it too so be warned.I plan this story to be long and hope you enjoy it.Thank You

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2015
Author: asurasa

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Rating: 4.8/ 5.0

Chapters(32 total)

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Community Reviews(6)

Lucian T. EinarRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
You say this is your first-time writing? Officially, well I suppose you've been writing for your own enjoyment not showing it to anybody else. In any case, it's pretty good material! You have a lot of potential.
In the opening chapter of "Grand Adventure," the story unfolds in the Kingdom of Eldoria, introducing the guard Edmund Reiner, who yearns for adventure. A flashback reveals his friendship with Cael and their divergent paths in life. Determined to embark on his own journey, Edmund leaves Eldoria, collapses at the gates of another kingdom, and is saved by Princess Alexia. Then participates in a tournament where he's utterly defeated. It is a great first chapter. However, it's a bit too rushed, too many things happened in such a short chapter. Try expanding it, make it twice as long, and fill in the gaps with more descriptions of day-to-day life events, things like how society works, this will improve worldbuilding by a long shot!
In Chapter 2, we see Edmund's precarious state after a near-fatal encounter. Healed again by Princess Alexia, who craves freedom, they plot an escape. This chapter feels too short for the action you trying to pack. I'll give you the same suggestion as in chapter 1.
In Chapter 3, we're introduced to some new characters. Kenna, Kaynard, Captain Cael Bluewater, and his guild members enjoy the evening. They discover a wanted poster featuring Ed and Princess Alexia. Later, a winged bear attacks Ed and Alexia. The chapter ends on a harrowing cliffhanger as the bear attacks.
I'm no expert, I still struggle with descriptions and different points of view. I'm still learning. However, Check this as it will help you improve!
SesamechiknRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I really enjoyed this story. Keep up the good work and keep them coming. Thanks!
hurt_lock3rRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Good story so far, and the flow is good. MC is not stupid; OP but not too much. Grammar needs a little work, but it's not hard to read. The world setting seems realistic, like how you portrayed the villages and how everyone is not a happy go lucky Samaritan. Looking forward to more chapters, and it's definitely worth the read.
lobozRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Good story, i really enjoy the story so far, haven't seen any fiction that good with a vampire as a main character, hope you keep it updated. Keep up the great work.
silkieRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
so far so good keep up the good work:)
Maaku Yuujiin KurosubiiRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
You have a good imagination and a knack for creating interesting characters and scenarios. Your story has a lot of potential and I was intrigued by the plot and the setting.
Overall, I think you have a good story, and you are improving with each chapter. I hope you don’t mind my feedback and that you keep writing. You have a lot of talent and creativity.