Get Off the Mountain

Self-Published

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Description

Odon and Terry want to get off the mountain and far, far away from their remote village before the next Sacrifice Day. Terry relies on superstitions while Odon relies on common sense. Terry carves charms too keep souls safe and Odon, she follows an old goat that leads her to a single path which winds down the side of the mountain.

Note: May be considered grimdark for certain readers, please be advised this work discusses death.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: CShadrockz

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 5.0/ 5.0
Followers: 4
Views: 4,620

Chapters(15 total)

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A V DalcourtRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Overall, this story is thoughtfully crafted with layers of interconnected subtext. It was a delight to have been introduced to this story.
Style: Told in first person from the POV of three main characters, it's surprisingly fluid without the usual problems associated with first person story telling. It doesn't take long to feel like the character is telling you the story which made it easy to fall into the rhythm of the plot.
Story: This is where the writer's thoughtfulness really shines through. I don't want to share too much because every chapter so far concludes with a surprise that's lightly foreshadowed, but also leads to more questions. In a nut shell, two of our heroes are the residents of a small mountain tribe who indulges in monthly ritual sacrifices as performed by their chief, who has more than a couple of reasons to participate in these blood sacrifices. Our heroes aspire to leave the mountain top, perhaps on the back of a great dragon.
Character: So far, we follow three characters. Not wanting to soil some delightful surprises, I'm going to keep it simple. Odon is largely action oriented, aspiring to realize Tero's dream of leaving the mountain. Tery is the local painter, turned vandal believing that if he scratches out the images of his loved ones, he is releasing their souls, enabling their return to the distant blue moon. And we have the chief - whose story I dare not reveal as it'll ruin the intrigue of the first two chapters. Obviously, if you've read my other reviews, you'll have noted that I really struggle with connecting with the characters or even remembering the characters names. This is not the case here - although I did wonder for about a chapter who the hell Udon was.
Grammar: Overall great - though I'm really not a great judge of that. There was a point where I wasn't sure if the writer was dropping words intentionally to mimic a speech pattern for one of the heroes, or if it was an issue with naming conventions and grammar rules, but me