Generation of the New Age

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2022

Author

Dzibuti

• Chapter 002
  Feb 21, 2022
• Chapter 001
  Feb 20, 2022

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• TealiciousTeaRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  A fun action litrpg with a battle maniac swordman. If that sounds up your street then I recommend this story. It is, however, lacking the polish that comes from editing.
  Style - big paragraphs that are not easy to read on digital devices like phones or even laptops. 3 and a half stars. Requires polish, and by that, I mean editing, usually with a second pair of eyes. It would make the action scenes easier to follow as well. Each 'actor/ character' should have their own paragraph usually  - it is not an iron-clad rule but generally useful advice.
  For example, in chapter five if the dryad is 'acting', that is the verb is about her actions then that should be in a separate paragraph from Lucas' actions. Just like you would do for speaking/dialogue. If this doesn't work for you that is fine. This is my opinion.
  Story -
  A fun action litrpg set in an alternate modern world where the system has altered reality. The world is transformed to be game-like. Common enough setting to be almost traditional at this point. It is described well mostly through showing the world and only a little exposition for what is needed to be known.
  Grammar -
  A few grammar errors, like tense switches, but mostly minor. 3 and a half stars. Same advice as I gave in the style section.
  Characters -
  Fun and filled with personality. Lucas is a battle manic, which I like. It keeps the pacing fast and the action frequent. The combat poses enough risks and creates enough injuries that it doesn't feel weightless.
• voratious_readerRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  You rarely see a pure swordsman LITRPG anymore. The system is okay and the way you can learn new skills is also a plus. The story is interesting and can be scaled more as there are hints of a multiverse. Overall, a good read so far, but needs some editing.
• Goat ManRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Disclaimer this review will contain spoilers!
  Style: this is one of the most annoying parts of the novel and one of the easiest fixes, though it did get better in later chapters, the first few are full of giant paragraphs which are hard to read.  This is easily fixed by breaking up the paragraphs a bit more.  Other than that, sometimes the fight scenes lack the impact they should have, to be honest, I don't have a suggestion on fixing that it's just something I noticed.
  Grammar:  Mostly solid though there is the odd questionable sentence that has to be priced together with the context from the previous and following sentences.
  Story: It starts out good with a solid unexpected plot twist in the first few chapters.  But it gets worse after the situation has calmed down and he is the leader of the settlement.  So, for context, he is the leader of the settlement because he is the strongest and led the rebellion as the leader because he was the strongest and not strongest by a little bit but by a large margin. He appoints the governor and has system-based control.  Now while I'm not saying he is all powerful, because the citizens would probably rebel if he became tyrannical, he doesn't or at least shouldn't have to play politics for deciding a guild leader for the new adventurer's guild especially when it's such a powerful position.  Why is there even an election in the first place? and if there was going to be one why is anyone allowed to join?  The author is forgetting/ ignoring that he is fundamentally a dictator and for a dictator to remain in power they need to keep control of all military-like organisations such as an adventurer's guild.  Therefore, guild independence makes no sense in the first place.  The guild should be run like the spy network, by its own leader that is under the governor, not some random elected official, again this is not a democratic system.  Also, this is ignoring the fact that the guy he doesn't want to win is a convicted criminal who has