For My Next Trick...
Self-Published
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Description
At twenty-four, Mason Chamberlain had it all. When scandal leaves him with a broken heart, not much could make him believe in love again...until the new governess for his eight-year-old sister arrives.
He's drawn to her. Despite Mason's good lucks and coveted status, he can't break through her chilly facade. She wants nothing to do with a duke's son. It slowly becomes clear to him that she's running from her past.
Her secret puts his family in jeopardy, but is this love worth the risk?
Information
- Status
- Completed
- Year
- 2022
- Author
- LynaForge
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.4/ 5.0
- Followers
- 9
- Views
- 9,094
Chapters(26 total)
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Community Reviews(2)
- EmpireofTrustRoyal Road★★★★★ 4.5This story was written so well, so sweet and gentle it made my teeth start to decay.
It has no build up or training sequence, it drops you into where things are already on the start of the slope and the semi driver has not realised his trailer has no brakes.
With barely any description the words paint the environment into your minds eye, you know who everyone is and where they live.
When there is a knowledge drop it is in conversation or the MC stressing about something in her mind. It all flows as part of the story.
This is not my cup of tea but the writing, prose and general deft touch in telling a story were so good I had to make sure its recognised. - ShyBoyRoyal Road★★★★ 3.5The story is essentialy a romance, a game of two characters. Supporting actors are there to fill a role and allow events to progress or chastise the male MC. Heck, even secondary male / female leads are rather one-dimensional - they aren't to be and there's little pretense made to that end. Thus, character score reflects our two main players.
This review is a hot one - I've just finished a story and part of me is undubitedly still processing it. The romance and the flow are the best parts, definitely. The romance is shown at the early stages, girl refuses boy, boy wonders what she means by anything and everything, and if there's no meaning, he invents the meaning anyway. I won't spoil you about later stages, read the piece yourself. :-)
Midway through the story the POV shifts from one main character to another. While the manouver was fairly interesting, provided some completeness and was initially refreshing... it was, in the end, detrimental to the story overall. I grew to quite dislike the shift and believe it took a lot of fun from the story.
Reason number one: I found Mason to be a MUCH weaker MC in many aspects.
Firstly, there's the fact that Mason IS the agency here. Almost EVERYTHING wouldn't have happened if not for him. That's a good thing, right? If only! Mason is nearly constantly apologizing for his agency. He did something... but it was bad because. He did something else, breaking another impasse, but it was bad, because... and GOSH. It's a never ending yank-the-chain.
His endless adoration and putting himself down so often while raising Poppy up weren't interesting to read for so many a chapter. At some point I had troubles seeing anything interesting in him. It helped, that there are essentially two male characters here, and the other is much worse but damn, that's a low bar.
Perhaps it was his clumsiness or lack of anything noteworthy going for him. Perhaps it was how his scandal was portrayed. Really minor spoiler ahead:
It wasn't a tragedy. It was.