Fallen Star
Self-Published
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Description
When Batho goes to find a fallen star to take as his present, he finds far more than he expected. For the star is intelligent, alien and power hungry.That fits him just fine, for he also wants power and with the star at his side, the world can be his.Warning: MC is the villain
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2015
- Author
- jseah
Tags
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.3/ 5.0
- Followers
- 1
- Views
- 2,206
Chapters(14 total)
- The second fallDec 31, 2023
- Race to the helmDec 30, 2023
- A worm in a rowboatDec 15, 2023
- Thomas jolted awakeNov 17, 2023
- Perimeter breachNov 4, 2023
- Gold above, Red belowOct 19, 2023
- TrudgeAug 19, 2023
- Half & half sheepApr 8, 2023
- 06 A Bigger StickApr 17, 2016
- 05 The Measure of a HeroJan 16, 2016
- 04 Harvest TimeNov 10, 2015
- 03 A TalkOct 31, 2015
- 02 ArilOct 30, 2015
- 01 PrologueOct 29, 2015
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Community Reviews(1)
- FattykinsRoyal Road★★★★★ 4.5Getting the biggest criticism up first; use more paragraph breaks! There were so many times when I lost track of the next line or my eyes glazed over looking at that giant wall of text. Like punctuation, paragraph breaks provide a scaffold that support and guide the reader so they can focus on the story itself.
And it is a fine story. What stands out the most compared to other RR stories are the strong characterizations. From the dialogue minor characters like the mayor, junior, Theo distinguished themselves. Even the twins Paul and Jackson stood apart during their overlapping conversations. And Rodrick was an excellent villain to carry the early story.
Lastly Thomas manages to have more nuance to him than most main characters from stories that are ten times as long. Hopefully this story doesn't get lost in the sea of updates.