EVERNA Maven

Information

Status

Ongoing

Year

2021

Author

vadis

• The Bittersweet Birthday - Part 1
  Nov 1, 2021
• Love on the Crossroads – Part 2
  Oct 31, 2021
• Love on the Crossroads – Part 1
  Oct 30, 2021
• Arrows and Hearts – Part 2
  Oct 29, 2021
• Arrows and Hearts – Part 1
  Oct 28, 2021
• The Merchant in Black – Part 2
  Oct 26, 2021
• The Merchant in Black – Part 1
  Oct 25, 2021
• The Big Heist - Part 2
  Oct 24, 2021
• The Big Heist - Part 1
  Oct 23, 2021
• The Truth - Part 2
  Oct 22, 2021
• The Truth - Part 1
  Oct 21, 2021
• Among Vipers and Wolves - Part 2
  Oct 20, 2021
• Among Vipers and Wolves - Part 1
  Oct 18, 2021
• The Hilltop Monastery – Part 2
  Oct 17, 2021
• The Hilltop Monastery - Part 1
  Oct 17, 2021
• The Last Istravel-Bouvignon
  Oct 16, 2021

Reviews

Community Reviews(1)

• luda305Royal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I read through "Among Vipers and Wolves" but skimmed through the rest.  Overall, the fiction is a melodramatic fantasy with some grammar and style issues which drag it down.
  Grammar is wonky.  There are verb tense shifts everywhere.  Also, an overabundance of ellipses.
  Style is extreme. Anime like, over the top.  Strange word choices in many instances, such as referring to wine as "distilled."  It can also be exposition heavy at time, especially when it comes to background, rather than revealing the background as needed.  And plenty of instances where the exposition was unncessary anyways (e.g., defining a "florin").
  Facets of both style and plot, the story itself is melodramatic.  Many scenes are stilted, partly transition, partly the author seeming to force the plot to move a certain way.
  Like chapter 3 involves a character insulting/criticizing another way above his station, but he's foolish enough not to do so quietly. She also turns out to be super suspicious and then adopts the protagonist, because she's an elf that can run fast. And for some reason children have no say into whether they get adopted. And then the aristocrat lady turns out to be a higher-up in a gang (which incidentally is the gang that killed the protagonist's parents). Which years (but only a few chapters later), leads to an overly dramatic confrontation where the caring monk who helped raise her tells her that the gang that adopted her killed her parents. And then they plot for four years to take down the gang by having her try and steal the monks' most famous artifact. And then she runs away with a traveling merchant and falls in love with him.
  It's a lot.
  Occasionally, there's an odd proselyzing to the reader about moral values. And occasionally, the characters are oddly meta-conscious about common fantasy tropes. Both are unusual to find in fantasy fiction.