Eternal Mana
Self-Published
Community Rating
Description
A young man woke up in another world with a reward system.
Almost done w another book. Hopefully have time to rewrite and research on Volume 2.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2019
- Author
- EatCelery
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.3/ 5.0
- Followers
- 690
- Views
- 151,237
Chapters(30 total)
- GoodbyeJul 31, 2019
- The TryoutsJul 30, 2019
- The ManatreeJul 29, 2019
- Playing GamesJul 29, 2019
- Three's a CrowdJul 28, 2019
- The 301Jul 27, 2019
- Beef PastriesJul 27, 2019
- KarkardoJul 27, 2019
- Combat TeamJul 26, 2019
- In Full BloomJul 26, 2019
- TerrorJul 26, 2019
- A Magical WorldJul 26, 2019
- Arango ForestJul 26, 2019
- BarriersJul 26, 2019
- Fenrir ShopJul 26, 2019
- Life of Everyday StudentJul 26, 2019
- Meridians and AurasJul 25, 2019
- Windel General LibraryJul 25, 2019
- ResultsJul 25, 2019
- The Dreaded Entrance ExamJul 25, 2019
Reviews
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Community Reviews(4)
- Andrew HoffmanRoyal Road★★★★ 3.5Pretty good, words need some polishing seems a little abrupt at times but definitely a good start. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of it
- BeyogiRoyal Road★★★★ 3.5The story is about a person that's been Isekaied to a fantasy world. He starts out as a peasant orphan, but manages to quickly improve his situation thanks to the "reward system" that gives him more or less random rewards and later shows his stats.
First he starts out as a fisherman, farmer and gatherer, then he advances to become a hunter until he's recruited into the local mage/cultivator academy. There he's learning magic, herbology and sigilogy (aka runecrafting).
Overall it's a decent enough story for the genre, but there's a bunch of weakpoints. First the grammar of this story leaves you wanting. It's not utterly horrible, but it's pretty rough and the way this story is written seems somewhat anime-esque on ocassion. If you can deal with web-translation of chinese Xianxia you can deal with this. Overall the writer might be advised to get a beta-reader though.
Second, the worldbuilding could be better. There's things like 7 years old joining the magic academy to dodge a potential draft... I'm not sure what kind of world that is, but recruiting children is generally considered an utter waste and a sign of desperation. On the other hand the author clearly put a lot of thoughts into the cultivation system. Between cultivators and mages that seem to be practicing two different techniques there's a lot of variance and things the MC can learn or not learn. While the MC has a cheat, he's clearly playing the same game as everyone else.
Third, there isn't much of a plot. This story seems very slice of lifeish and the protagonist generally does what seems most opportune. He doesn't seem to have many goals and there's not much driving him. It's kind of realistic in a way, but as a result there isn't much tension.
I'm pretty split about the character overall. On one hand he seems to know when to back down and not take a challenge - a are thing in stories such as this - but on the other hand he seems over talented. While he seems to be a college student reincarnated into hi - karm4Royal Road★★★ 3.0Wellll....
It is definitely a beginners work. Dont expect too much from this story as it is the first steps from a new fledgling author.
Not going to blame him for it, but there is a lot to be improved in this. Starting from Grammar to an unplaned storyline missing any coherent flow. Missing explanations from suddenly revealed informations....
Still giving 3 stars for the overall score because it is my type of story and maybe not to demotivate the author too early.
An important note for the author if you read this:
Stop using 1 sentence paragraphs!!
This ruins any flow or coherency in any story. - TcainRoyal Road★★ 1.5I love the story, but, dear lord, you need someone to fix up your work. Its choppy, and just all around a mess.
The story is great. I love it. I just don't like the way you're presenting it.