Era of Venture

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2021

Author

cloven

• Hiatus for Some Revision and Refining
  Apr 17, 2022
• (Ch). 2 - Vague Whispers
  Apr 11, 2022
• (Ch). 1 - Every Star in the Sky
  Sep 9, 2021

Reviews

Community Reviews(2)

• AurazRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Synopsis? 10/10
  1st Chapter? 10/10
  Everything else? TBD
  Since your new and unprofessional writer, I'll cut you some slack. This is a very fast-paced novel which I don't mind. I would recommend slowing it down a bit and stretching out every moment.
  At first, I held off because it was new and short, and the long hiatus. I thought that I had followed enough progression fantasies.
  Style 4.5/5
  kind of confusing but Each POV has there own way of thinking and their own style. Very creative.
  Grammar: 3.5/5
  the grammar is alright, no completely noticeable mistakes but it needs work. You have problems with showing vs. telling, plus past tense vs. present tense. Besides that, nothing really.
  Story: 4/5
  The story seems interesting but it reminds me of Tower of God. But there isn't a tower, but just to be safe put a creative twist on it. The trials seem a little like the Tower so hopefully, it doesn't eat up most of the story.
  Characters: 4/5
  The characters are relatable, especially Lina since she wants to spend time on her own and is annoyed by her brother and her friends. Hopefully, you keep that aspect of her. Luken isn't relatable but he seems like a person that could actually exist if he lived in isolation.
  I will be awaiting the day all 3 characters meet. More has happened in the first 4 chapters than in the first book of most novels. This is a really good story, not the best but still highly recommended.
  chapter 5 edit: pretty hilarious too
  I might be speaking a bit too soon but I enjoyed reading this.
• Oliver LawsRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  An interesting start, but definitely in need of fine tuning and some rewriting in my opinion.
  The first chapter is very confusing from the get-go. I found myself having to reread sentences quite a few times to get an idea of what was trying to be conveyed, which isn’t the best for a story like this. I understand the author is trying to start things off mysteriously but the stream of consciousness POV made things quite hard to follow and get into, and the opening narration right at the start was a lot at once to absorb. I think it would work better if this worldbuilding was paced out over the first couple of chapters and there was a clearer POV to bring you into the world.
  While the start is a little rough, the writing style is quite solid. I noticed a few awkward sentences that could have been improved to flow easier, as well as some typos, but for the most part things seemed well written and formatted. Definitely worth checking over again however as a few sentences need changing around to make sense. For example there is a common issue of non capitalised words after speech which should be fixed.
  I did like the thoughts of the characters being written,  and the multiple viewpoints gave quite a lot of variety. They were all different enough that it kept things fresh, but there was some clunky exposition and awkward dialogue through them which took me out of the story. A lot of people do prefer third person for multiple POVs like this, but I think they write first person narration well and make each character feel unique enough for it not to be an issue.
  The author definitely does have a knack for writing fluid action scenes. These always were very well written and easy to follow. I think these are something the writer should focus more on as they are definitely a strength.
  After reading all that is available, one of the major issues is that the story does lack direction at the moment. You do get some interesting scenes, but the narrative bounces between these seeming