Enthadar: The Legendary Planet

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2023

Author

TheRottingBard

• Chapter 1: Birds of a Feather
  Jan 4, 2023

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• S.N. KeirsteadRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Feels like a DnD campaign turned into a novel. Lots of strong descriptions with plenty of characters that (I assume) have very deep backstories.
  There's a bit of blue box on the beginning. Not sure how the system works, but it has the elements needed for a LitRPG.
  Prose is the strongest part. It's short yet detailed. There are minor punctuation issues but they don't detract from the text.
• Inkwell RabbitRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Enthadar is Bard's way of jotting down countless games he's probably DM'd in tabletops and applying them into a tale with a party of adventures, each unique with abilities and class, but also with their own backgrounds.
  Style: 4/5
  Bard's style of story telling is tough for me to get into. He has a mixture of modern day dialogue with medieval, which sounds off-putting while reading. He also seems to ignore to introduce key character aspects to later reveal ideas that would have sunk with impact, but comes off meaningless and confusing because of the lack of set up.
  Bard's fight scenes are action packed, and a thrill to read, but organized terribly, using multiple character actions in the same paragraph instead of each individual paragraphs.
  Bard's conversations are very long exchanges for the most part, going back and forth between each character. I have no problem with that, in fact I adore well done dialogue in stories, however the characters take little to no actions leaving the reader to imagine the characters standing perfectly still as a they talk to each other, like a cheap cartoon.
  I think this is mainly just clunky writing more than a style choice, so I think with more writing practice, he can over come these immersion breaking problems
  Grammar: 4.5/5
  The grammar for the most part is clean, with some minor hiccups here and there. Honestly, it doesn't really take you out of the story.
  Story: 5/5
  This is where the Bard shines. I only got to chapter 8, which was filled with separate mini stories of different characters, coming off more like an anthology instead of a novel or web serial. However the stories were each unique and you quickly find which character is your favorite and who you want to follow. In this case, Everan the Siege Mage.
  I think what bothered me most with the other characters I encounted, such as Teragor and Bee, you find out when they level (why Teregor got to level, I may never know) what their various classes are, but other than Everan, yo
• shibazoidRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I believe that this story has merit. It’s a TRPG story, but it’s not set in a typical medieval fantasy setting, which is refreshing. The story is straight to the point and does not meander. The tone is consistent throughout: dark, but not egregiously grim. For readers who are looking for a unique and grounded fantasy, I’d recommend this, especially to those who enjoy TRPG adaptations.
  I do have a few criticisms, almost entirely subjective. Prose style is terse in places it doesn’t need to be and overly-descriptive when terseness would be ideal. The early fight scenes, specifically in chapters two and four, are not as impactful as they could be because of this, i.e. single actions broken up into multiple sentences, which affects the flow of action, making it seem slow. Early pacing is too fast and emotional moments lack weight as a result, and characters are not given much time to really be established. These things are all forgivable and do not make the story poor or unreadable, and more or less boils down to personal preference.
  The writing does improve over time and shows a lot of promise, and the author is open to corrections without resistance, which is admirable. I’d be interested in seeing the kinds of things the author writes in the future. They do good work, and I’m sure fans of the genre won’t be disappointed.