Endless Expanse Online

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2018

Author

BloodneverLies

• Chapter 12- Embers and Sparks
  Dec 1, 2018
• Chapter 11- Costs of Rebellion
  Nov 30, 2018
• Chapter 10- UNK427 and Troubles with Authority
  Nov 27, 2018
• Chapter Intermission Cont..
  Aug 16, 2018
• Chapter Intermission
  May 8, 2018
• Chapter 9-UNK425 Suprise
  May 1, 2018
• Chapter 8- Riptide rolls again
  Apr 30, 2018
• Chapter 7 Cont-UNK322 and Cost of War
  Apr 27, 2018
• Chapter 7- Echoes of War
  Apr 26, 2018
• Chapter 6- UNK521 and Ruins of the Past
  Apr 22, 2018
• Chapter 5- Caldear and Eyes in the Dark
  Apr 19, 2018
• Chapter 5-Abraxxus and Beyond
  Apr 15, 2018
• Chapter 4- Orders and Departures
  Apr 14, 2018
• Chapter 3-Legacy
  Apr 12, 2018
• Chapter 2- Diving in
  Apr 12, 2018
• Chapter 1- Propositions
  Apr 11, 2018
• Glossary
  Apr 11, 2018

Reviews

Community Reviews(8)

• RazinalRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Sci-fi VRMMORPG stories are rare. and this one is one of higher quality ones. Read it, you won't be dissapointed.
  👍👍👍
• LarryRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Story idea is good.
  Does go into lots of world building inbetween action sequences.
  Was going to mention to have the MC go on more missions, but this last chapter has him doing just that. Would like to see more of him in the action.
  Only a couple misspellings or added words per chapter.
  Overall well worth the read.
• BisshopRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  I love it. Almost as much as Blood and honour. Got some grammar mistakes and yes sometimes it can use a little more paragraph spacing. But story is great.
• Yami SeekerRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Well, damn. Took me around 3-4 hours of constant reading to finish. The story is extremely well developed and I have to say it is amazing. Even so, in keeping the interest of the reader that aren't sci-fi fans. The last 2-3 chapters were really a drag to read. In the end, it was still enjoyable as the story was greatly developed.
  Although there might be a few grammar mistakes such as in a chapter you typed "Mocro" instead of "Micro" fissures. This won't harm the story though. Even so, just keep an eye out for this tiny mistakes and even if you don't it won't matter. The characters still need a bit more of developing but since it just started and the chapters themselves aren't too long to wear a person down its understandable.
  The story also does in a way keep the readers interest through the background story but I have to admit. The info dumps of the events and discoveries can wear people down if they read constantly. Which will deter the new readers but the older ones will enjoy it. You also did a really good job in creating the setting as well. I was quite impressed by the small details your added but didn't go so in-depth to the point that one would barf them out.
  We also managed to get character insight of John but not so much on the others. John still needs some developing though, but it can be done one step at a time. Or this could also be you leaving room for the readers imagination but his feelings could also slightly help. Such as irritation, fear, calmness (already being used so good job), excited, etc.
  Overall, the story is really good and I would give it 4.5/5* for it. Just attempt to keep the readers attention through this kinds of events.
  As for base building, I will wait for it but I will not be able to constantly read and comment since I have school to take care off. Even so, I did take off some time to do this comment and read through the whole story in 1 sitting. Which shows my interest. I can write this as a review but kinda lazy. Just commenting
• A TRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Really, its soo good that I nearly forgot all about it, skills and classes dont get heavy handed in the story, its all about the captain and his choices, he did not disappointed me and I hope he wont dissapoint you as well.
  Thank you for your hard work Mr. BloodneverLies.
• sa1880612mRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  Learn to space your text out. As it is now it's basically unreadable. Especially regarding dialouge.
  I couldn't even be bothered to finish the first chapter when I saw an entire conversation taking place in what is more of a wall of text than a paragraph.
  There could very well be an amazing story under that but I'm not even going to try and find it.
  Don't take the threes to heart. Just needed to be there for review to submit. If you edit it into something readable, PM me and I'll take another look and edit this, or ignore me entirely. Up to you.
• KuronekkoRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  Hey, I got through the first chapter and while I love the premise, and I think you've got a good thing going here, I belive (and looking through the reviews I think some people agree) that you really need to take a look at either proofreading it yourself, or, if English is not your first language, maybe getting a first language English speaker to do that for you.
  I also feel like you could improve this novel by maybe going over it a quick second time, maybe when you've gotten the novel to a reasonable time to pause, and then doing some minor revision on the 'flow' of the novel. To start that, space the text out a bit more; for example in chapter 1 when Wolfgang goes to get his boys and his ex, to let them know his situation after meeting the executive. That whole paragraph doesn't read very well. It's all a single block, and there's no sense of a pause, so instead a somewhat grave or important moment is made to feel rushed, less impactful and a bit dull.
  And starting a new line for a different speaker (you can always use a 'chorus' ie chorus of agreement/dissent, exclamations or expletives etc, as a single line) is in my mind always a good way to make dialogue feel less cramped, and more fluid.
  On that note, I personally feel that the way of speaking in a lot of novels on RoyalRoad is a bit dry, so I'd like to point out that this complaint isn't specifically at you. A lot of characters I see talking do so in the exact same way as everybody else, ie the same structure, the same phrases and colloquialisms and so on. If you can come up with a style, even if it's not too different, then you inject a certain sense of personality into the text that the reader can now relate to and create a better mental projection of the character in question.
  An example would be that some characters might tend to be short sentenced, straight to the point and sometimes not even speak if they don't see a need to, while others may have a slight accent, shortening and connecting specific wor
• JknottRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  Love the concept of  this book. Sadly i feel your book lacks an emotional connection. Your characters are 2d.