Empire of Death

Self-Published

Community Rating

Description

"One, two... ten thousand.One million, ten million... hundreds of millions.An army of billions of steel legions in the starry sky will sweep across the universe in the name of 'genius.'

By an unexpected twist of fate, Fang Mingwei acquires the legacy of necromancy, gradually growing stronger by mastering the manipulation of souls. With each step, he becomes a super genius, one who masters a vast array of skills, ready to dominate in a future where technology and power blend seamlessly in the boundless cosmos."

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2025
Author: Jojolkn

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.0/ 5.0
Followers: 2
Views: 4,160

Reviews

No reviews yet. Be the first to share your thoughts!

Community Reviews(1)

CataFlanRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
There's a lot of holes, I know it's a little too early for this, but there's a lot to improve.
At first he can cultivate (?) to get more mental power. Ok. But one session to jump a lot of levels? No, thank you.
There are at least four names for the MC, the latter chapters are awfully formatted, the former chapters are long while the latter are shorter. There's a lot to do in the formatting camp, but nothing impossible or hard.
The grammar shows that it was translated from another language, perhaps? I don't know, but there's a lot to improve there too.
In this setting the humans can live 300 years and study until they're 50 years old? Okay, but don't make a 20 years old youngster this naive, for gods sake... It's like he was chained in his bed till now. In a moment he was never there, a little bit late he see a "familiar view"? Don't make sense.
The plot is good, a stone that was synchronized with his brain waves and he got the inheritance, learn a cultivation technique (?) and a lot of spells, ok. Good. But then he goes to school to drive mechas? Why? What this have to do with anything else? It's a good idea for a necromancer story, you can add Mecha in it? Ok, but let's improve it a little. Summon souls inside a sensor? Why? To write essays? WHY?
A good writer in this site once told in an interview that it's better to write a little bit more than a few chapters to get a hold of where are you going. This is the wisdom I impart to you. You are posting chapter 10? Has at least chapter 15 already wrote down. You will have to rewrite a lot of things in the 11th, 12th and 13th? Ok, but at least you know where are you going.
I'm following because I liked in general, but I want to see some improvement.
Thank you so far.