Elfrikaners

Self-Published

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Description

Welcome to Elfrica!Transported to a Fantasy Victorian world, VoortrekkerJan Boddewijk is forced to contend with a world that breaks his historical immersion.What do you mean all that the Zulusare all elves! And why is it a matriarchal society!How come humans don't have magic and every other race have magic! All we have are these sh*tty guns!Why are all the artisans' non-violent cultivators! Why do they all look like muscle men!His first goal? Ensure the survival of the fledging Natalia Republic,which will be annexed by the British in a couple of years.

Notes:

First few chapters will begin by exploring the landscape.

Around the tenth chapter onwards, elements of Town/Kingdom Building will begin.

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Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: Jaykingamez

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Rating: 3.7/ 5.0
Followers: 29
Views: 31,082

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Pieter BredenkampRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
I find it interesting that I have downvotes on my review. If you disagree, please leave your own review/remarks. Writers need feedback. And your feedback is essential, so that us, the reader, have a better experience as the author grows in skill.
1) Some of the ideas are novel. In my opinion most are pretty good, but there might be too many. Time will tell. Ideas are like plots in my opinion. If you go overboard you risk going crazy keeping it all together.
2) He gets Afrikaans culture horrifying wrong in quite a few places and does participate in some culture assassination. But then, he is also not saying anything any other uninformed person is not. I just... expected more? I mean, if your setting is Victorian England don't have your characters serve tea and rum, with white bread slathered in vegamite. ('Everybody' knows Victorian England had ceylon tea with scones. :P)
3) A lot of Afrikaans is used in the earlier chapters. That's nice. I would suggest you just skim over this if you are proficient in the language.
4) One idea I can get fully behind are his church. It might be seen as blasphemous by some, but I rather liked it.
5) The travel magic is strong in this book. I did point it out, but when the writer uses particular locations, just... I don't know.... use a pinch of salt?
All in all it is eminently readable, with very few glaring problems. I have bought worse at Amazon Kindle.