in the near future people can be perminatly implanted in a game like world as many races. matthew became a dungeon. but for how long will he stay a mere dungeon? ill post more chapters if people like it so comment your opinion.

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madmatthew200Royal Road

★★★★★ 4.5

only 1 probem with the story so far and that is how weak the mc is he is meant to be a dungeon ...... a 19 million doller dungeon ........ yet he can barley beat anything and lost 9 million cash for no reason after the reset he was given nothing for his extra money not even mana yet everyone else kept their baught bonuses
think the mc needs to be stronger other than that great story
also what happened to his ability to pull mana out of the air ???? it magicly disapeared along with 9 million

PeppermancerRoyal Road

★★★★ 3.5

You have a good concept, but you don't seem to have a direction for your story. I mean, mid way, you just basically wiped everything and started over, but kept it in the same story. I recommend you plan it out a bit better, and do a full restart. You have good ideas for what you want your dungeon to do, you just need to decide on it and stick too it instead of being all wishywashy. Commit to your ideas.

T_JRoyal Road

★★★ 3.0

*Spoilers Ahead*
The idea of the story would be good if I actually had an idea of what was happening. The stories premise has changed twice and I'm honestly not sure after this latest chapter if he is still a dungeon or not. It seemed like the first "restart" happened because you didn't like where the story was going and just chose a easy way out. Now he's a major God?
Why not just focus on the actual aspects of dungeon building which you are good at? I enjoyed reading about how the dungeon grew, but it seems it's been moving away from the original idea you had.
Your grammar is good though the colour of the font changes regularly in the first 10 or so chapters and it can be hard to read at times.
Hope you take this review on board and try to improve your story further in the future!

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