Droning on: A superpower story

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Description

Dylan, like most kids, dreamed of being a superhero. So, it should be a dream come true when he gains the power to make objects that disobey the laws of reality. Instead, Dylan finds that blindly pursuing his dreams might not net him what he wants. Will he be able to live up to his own expectations, or will things take a turn for the worse?

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Status: Ongoing
Year: 2024
Author: Asendedreality

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Rating: 4.6/ 5.0
Followers: 313
Views: 78,410

What readers say about Droning on: A superpower story

“Honestly its a lively little supe hero romp so far. Author had a little trouble with grammar and spelling but has improved massively and it doesn't detract from the story at all. Enjoyed it and want to read more and see how the mc develops and matures. I w…”
catbearpenguinRoyal Road5.0 / 5
“Dylan didn't want to be a villain, he sort of stumbled into it. But the details aren't humorous or tragic, they are just the consequences of poor decisions by Dylan and the people he interacts with. None of the decisions are stupid per say, but rather they…”
Zenopath (AEV)Royal Road5.0 / 5

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Community Reviews(9)

catbearpenguinRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Honestly its a lively little supe hero romp so far. Author had a little trouble with grammar and spelling but has improved massively and it doesn't detract from the story at all. Enjoyed it and want to read more and see how the mc develops and matures.
I will say however that 50 words for a non advanced review is excessive
Zenopath (AEV)Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Dylan didn't want to be a villain, he sort of stumbled into it. But the details aren't humorous or tragic, they are just the consequences of poor decisions by Dylan and the people he interacts with. None of the decisions are stupid per say, but rather they are the inevitable result of giving people super powers in a realistic world setting that is strained to near breaking by the growing number of supers. It feels almost like this story is projecting what the world of MHA was like in the early early days when only 1% had quirks and no one had started schools to help people learn how to handle their powers. Very interesting world building, worth a read.
kingphantom313Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
It’s a nice story and the author is getting better with every chapter. It’s a good premise and a believable characters and the world sitting and building is intriguing so far. Would definitely give it a chance. Would definitely give it a read you would not be disappointed . …………..,,,,,,,,,,,…………………………………….
ArockalypseRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
At face value, it's a fun and well written superhero setting with grittier elements. Mc's power is generalist tech genius which is really broad and has salivating prospects.
On a core level though, it does something I've never seen even published young adult fictions get just right: a tragic fall of a naive but well-intentioned adolescent boy into a hateful and twisted person. Partly because of his own immaturity, but also because his family and society are very imperfect. It's such a real thing that happens to so many people, and resonates with my own past where I too was angry as a teen and got tangled with the wrong crowd because they were the only ones to reach a hand out when society did jack. Unbelievably special.
The tragedy part is done so well; you know what's going to happen and you dread it because if something somewhere had gone just a bit better maybe he wouldn't have snapped, maybe he would've opened up and everything would have gone great, used his power's vast capacity to bring a technological golden age. But instead the flaws of the justice system and the mistakes of his parents (who are well-intentioned) push him to the dark side.
LoDRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This story is off to a great start. The MC is young and well intentioned but quickly ends up in over his head after things go wrong. The characters are well written and believable, though the worldbuilding is yet to be fully fledged out.
There are a few info dumps here and there but it's quite manageable.
If the author keeps up the quality, and manages regular updates (which he has pledged to do, but has not yet delivered), it should shoot up to rising stars in no time.
Author if you're reading this, i would suggest reading "Supervillainy and Other Poor Career Choices" if you haven't already. It might be a great source of inspiration.
pelvicthrustingmywaytoheavenRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Overall really Good start one thing I think you should fix right now though is how pace slow it down a bit.give more explanations and world building that flow well and complement your writing style.there’s really not much else that can be improved spelling was fine no improper usage of grammar.
Haru Desu KattoRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This story was suggested by the algorithm as something I would like. Based on the title and description it sounded fun - though I didn't read the tags, so it took me a while to realize the "villainous lead" was part of the goal. That 's still great, but you may want to touch up your story's description to give a little more preview.
In the same vein, at least so far, the title doesn't really fit the story. I'm guessing the drone aspect will take up more focus in the future.
Style - Well-written and structured. Each idea leads to the next and the text and choice of words both flow well.
Grammar - I don't really care, as long a a story is legible and easy to understand. As such, this will not affect my overall scoring. Even so, the number of spelling errors and misused homonyms were distracting. For example, "hero's" is not the plural form of "hero." I'd suggest going back through and cleaning up the text.
Story - Mostly interesting and proceeding nicely. I especially like the MC's despair, anger, loss of control, and unexpected consequences. Even more, I like seeing how he doesn't understand the world. My favorite scene is the MC's confused explanations and arguments before his battle with Kashan. The fights themselves are well-written, although like many comic-books, they often feel unnecessary to the story. I'd suggest not falling into the "need another fight" pattern just to keep things rolling.
Character - The MC himself starts the story as pretty uninteresting without much depth - though, his personality grows in over time. I have to admit, the first few chapters feel rushed - so much that I almost put it down. The other characters are hit-and-miss. I absolutely loved Hasborough and Kashan. Others didn't stick with me, so much so, I don't even remember names. With how the story has turned, I'm worried that the characters I liked best may be gone now.
aka_MAXRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
This story presents an intriguing premise, with a protagonist whose descent into a 'villainous lead' unfolds in a manner that feels both organic and compelling. The author demonstrates a firm grasp of character development, particularly in the MC's internal struggles and evolving motivations. The moments of despair and the consequences of the MC's actions are handled with a refreshing realism that sets this story apart.
However, the early chapters suffer from pacing issues, feeling somewhat rushed. There's a noticeable lack of in-depth worldbuilding, which leaves the reader wanting more context and explanation. While the author's writing style is generally fluid and engaging, grammatical errors and misused homonyms occasionally disrupt the reading experience. A thorough proofread is recommended to polish the text.
The character dynamics are a mixed bag. Certain characters, like Kashan and Hasborough, are exceptionally well-crafted and memorable, while others fade into the background. The fight scenes, while well-written, sometimes feel extraneous, potentially detracting from the story's overall progression.
In summary, this story shows considerable potential. The author's ability to portray the MC's complex emotional journey is a definite strength. With improved pacing, more robust worldbuilding, and meticulous editing, this story could truly shine. I would recommend this story to readers who enjoy character-driven stories set in superpowered worlds with realistic consequences.
drandreasRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Was good while it lasted. Only a few minor points here and there that could have used some polish but overall I enjoyed the story. No idea where things were going to end up where you left things but that’s ok. Good luck on your writing journey. I hope you continue to enjoy writing and write for many more years to come