Diary of the Shadow Queen

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2018

Author

kaplanicus

• Chapter 9
  Feb 5, 2018
• Chapter 8
  Feb 3, 2018
• Chapter 7
  Feb 3, 2018
• Chapter 6
  Feb 2, 2018
• Chapter 5
  Feb 1, 2018
• Chapter 4
  Jan 31, 2018
• Chapter 3
  Jan 30, 2018
• Chapter 2
  Jan 29, 2018
• Chapter 1
  Jan 28, 2018

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• user 1441Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  There are some typos, but they are easy to overlook in their context. The story is very well done and enjoyable. Even the elements that are a bit phobia inducing are well done. One of my favorite things so far is that the main character doesn't blindly submit to controls, just because! There seems to be character and reasons behind her decisions, she doesn't just wake up one day and flip her motivations.
  Anyway, great story, great story telling! +1000 muse/author hugs!
  furthest read so far is chapter 127.   :)
• GhostwolfRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I have enjoyed reading about the character particularly in regards to her creativity and compasion.
• uavgasRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  This is a story set in modern times, right before the apocalypse starts and afterward. There are many stories about a person in modern times dying and being sent to ancient times, or some cultivation realm, or another world of some sort to reincarnate into someone's body. This story is along that vein, and is about a guy dying post-apocalypse after being overrun by monsters and being sent back pre-apocalypse times; reincarnating into the body of a girl that had just died or had a complete mental collapse after years of child abuse by her father. Now in the body of a girl, she decides to try to start cultivating before the apocalypse happens in order to get above of the power curve. This is an interesting spin on the whole reincarnation and cultivation genres, and I look foward to where this will go as the story progresses.
  The grammar is pretty good and is very readable even if there are some silly mistakes. (See the synopsis above, where the author spells "dying" as "dieing.") However, I have not spotted any mistakes is grammar or spelling that have ruined the story or broken my immersion.
  All in all, this is a wonderful start to a story, and I am eagerly awaiting more chapters. Thank you kaplanicus, and keep up the good work.
• keijoRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  The story is enjoyable to read but the fact is that Maxine's father basically killed his daughter with his actions. The fusion of souls has lead that there only exists bits and pieces of the original Maxine and Maxvell is clearly the driving force. Even in this situation the parents are acting like everything is fine and dandy.
  4,5/5 for the story itself and lowered to 3,5/5.
• PeacefulVinRoyal Road

  ★★★ 3.0

  I'm going to try to write this review without spoiling anything.
  Story:
  The story started off decently but quickly took a downward spiral, most of the actions the main character takes doesn't exactly show that of a mid 20s man. The story is also quite inconsistent, the premise of the story in the beginning is that of a apocalypse, this quickly deteriorated down to it not being an apocalypse and turned into a family drama-xianxia sect novel instead?
  Grammar:
  I usually copy and paste novels I read on here into a text to speech program because it makes it easier for me to read and follow along as well as let me do things well enjoying novels. Even with that though, I've noticed frequent grammar mistakes being made within the novel, just spelling mistakes you would expect from a sentence being typed too quickly. This can be easily fixed with typing out the chapter first in google docs first to see the grammar mistakes or even just rereading the chapter a few times. Another thing I am disappointed about is the near 0 development of the
  shadow world. It started off as a whole different world that had people in it then as the story progressed the world just turned into the MC's glorified herb garden with no plot development. She didn't even do any exploring within the world.
  Character:
  The worst thing I've found is the inconsistent character personalities and bahaviors. Like how the MC both hates men but ohh every man the mc knows she's perfectly fine with them
  SHE EVEN OFFERS HER GF A THREESOME WITH HER FORMER SELF then later in the story SHE STATES SHE CAN NEVER INTIMATE WITH A MAN
  . Another character relation I've hated within this novel is how the MC is stated to be a lesbian many times and is 'dating' this girl but she never says it when relationship issues pop up within the novel. She then somehow has a crush on her former best friend from her past life, but no because of her
  fused soul
  she doesn't feel attracted to anyone except her girlfriend.
  Another gripe I have
• Troubled_oneRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  The story is ok, if unoriginal.
  The story premise is one I enjoy and has promise. The author has a good grasp of the English language and has reasonable grammar. The story is mainly portrayed in a stream of consciousness style with some competence.
  I find myself unable to continue with the story due to the fact that the supposedly experienced adult MC keeps making completely childish decisions. These decisions don't make sense in context and turn a story with potential into something I find painful to read.
  The author may try to use the excuse of the supposed blending of the adult and child souls. However the lack of the MC even in hindsight regretting the childishness of the decisions puts the lie to that.
  I  hope the author continues writing however I suggest they keep their characters a bit more within their own life experience to avoid this issue in future.
• BedwigRoyal Road

  ★★★ 2.5

  Like the title, the premise was good. It got my attention, but I couldn't stand the way it was written.
  The MC feels like those heroic weaklings in other novels that died young. There are also some contradictions. The MC is an experienced man, but he/she fought the bear like a complete newbie. The author even mentioned it, I think, that he/she made a mistake. This is only one of the contradictions I noticed so far.
  Then there's the side characters. They're flat as hell. You have no idea what they're like, nothing except their names.
  I don't mind the lesbian romance, but it just feels like it came out of nowhere. You got to make it more gradual. Don't just slam it in readers' faces like, "Guess what?! They're together now!"
  Not enough explanation is given, because most of the things that happened felt like it appeared out of thin air.
  The pacing is way too fast, and skips multiple details that would've helped the reader understand the story better.
  The grammar is fine, but it's the spelling that's down right awful. The mistakes are usually like spelling 'should', 'shoudl', or spelling 'a lot' as 'alot', and others like that. There's also using the wrong 'their' 'there' or 'they're'.
  The spelling itself isn't that bad, but it occurs enough to really irritate me. There's also the massive text walls.
  The dialougue feels forced and stiff. The characters also speak like their speech is all rehearsed.
  I think if the author edits for the spelling mistakes, the quality would be better. Also reduce the size of the paragraphs. Those are way too big.
• trekshcoolRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  PS: I have edited it after finding out about some details I missed but my main points still hold.
  Look in the spoiler for a more comprehensive review
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  First mc almost got caught cultivating by an enslaving lunatic general, then for some reason, mc saved that lunatic generals relative, and in doing that she revealed her powers.
  (Correction: mc got caught because he broke through his stage in the school, not because of Emily, but mc saving Emily still seems counter-intuitive to me because of the general.
  And we were only ever told that mcs plan was good, he shouldn't have gotten caught because of the number of people around. And so I assumed that the reason he got caught was that either his energy bolts were discovered while he saved Emily or Emily betrayed him.
  Mc said that the sensors weren't good enough for him to get caught if he was in a crowd.)
  The relative who mc saved, Emily snitched on mc and told the lunatic general about mc even though mc saved her life. Subsequently, mc got captured, almost enslaved, experimented on and tagged with a tracking device like an animal.
  (Correction: Emily didn't tell but everything other than that happened. He got almost enslaved, experimented on and tagged like an animal. Keep in mind this is by Emily's relative)
  Even after that mc wanted to teach that bitch, Emily, how to cultivate and was nice to her. Fully knowing what would happen if the general found out about it. Its so borderline suicidal!
  (Correction: This statement still holds true, even after mc found out that the lunatic general was Emily relative mc still took suicidal risks to give Emily a cultivation technique.
  Keep in mind mc does not owe this girl anything, she is essentially an acquaintance mc has barely known for days.)
  This behavior is so far removed from the seasoned cultivator who reincarnated that it completely ruins the story. Mc even swore to himself he would only care about growing stronger himself and not be a charity figure, this was
• tyes77Royal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  Self-destructive MC that makes dumb decisions and story direction that has me skipping over portions hoping for something to prop up. Her friends are by far the most uninteresting bunch of characters i've ever read about
• BookmanRoyal Road

  ★★ 2.0

  There are no spoilers in this as most of the information can be found at the first chapter
  I had to quit at chapter 11.
  Its interesting but:
  -The pacing is too fast. It feels like the story is skipping and its missing a lot of dialogs.
  -To much a wall of text. Please put some space between the sentences. Make logical cuts or do a proofreading of it at least.
  Last point which made me drop this in the end:
  -Another lesbian mc. This one is personal but i feel like 99 of 100 female MCs are lesbian nowdays and it sucks.
  There are some good lesbian storys but most are just like this one. MC is lesbian because the Author wants it.
  As a note for the Author: When a boy turns into a girl or a girl into a boy there is more to it then just the body type.
  There are hormons at play and they play a big part in how we feel. Sexual orientation is in the end just a biological reaction of our body to sensor input.
  It is far more likely for a boy that turns into a girl to like boys.
  That is the main reason why im sick of Web novels that use the lesbian card.
  Its so overused and unrealistic that it breaks the story for me.
  There really needs to be a tag for this or a warning on the front page text.
  That is my personal opinion after chapter 11. If you are into this stuff then give it a go but for me this story is just to weird.
  That beeing said i give it 3,5 stars for the main plot but had to deduce 1 star for the bad pacing and 1 star for the bad lack of proofreading and editing.