Devour Heaven

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"Yet that is when I realized. If a God is simply one that rules and is worshipped by all. Then what is stopping me from becoming the entity you worship?"Read Oz's path to Destroy, Devour and Ascend, no matter what it takes.WARNING: THIS BOOK IS NOT FOR THE FAINT OF THE HEART! THE MAIN CHARACTER IS !!!NOT!!! A HERO NOR IS HE A GOOD OR EVEN A DECENT PERSON!SUPPORT ME ON PATREON FOR EARLY CHAPTERS- patreon.com/2A1Z____________________JOIN THE DISCORD COMMUNITY: https://discord.gg/Y4ygPrZ____________________FOLLOW ME ON MY SOCIALS:Youtube: Atomfactor - https://www.youtube.com/@AtomfactorrTwitch: Atomfactor_ - https://www.twitch.tv/atomfactor_Instagram: Atomfactor - https://www.instagram.com/atomfactor/Tiktok: Atomfactor - https://www.tiktok.com/@atomfactor-----------------------------------------------------------------------------------[OLD] ARTIST CREDIT: https://www.deviantart.com/mizu-no-akira/art/Heart-s-Blood-515591858[AMAZING ARTWORK][NEW] ARTIST CREDIT: https://www.deviantart.com/aoiogataartist/art/Stigmata-837390959[AMAZING ARTWORK]CURRENT ARTWORK COMMISIONED BY [ AoiOgataArtist ]My first book so I'm open to any criticism and suggestions.

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Status: Ongoing
Year: 2022
Author: Atomfactor

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Rating: 2.4/ 5.0
Followers: 29
Views: 16,582

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DarkPlazmaRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
I'm a fairly avid fan of the litrpg genre, and I'm definitely a sucker for a gritty isekai. A fairly ordinary protagonist, dragged into a world they have no way of understanding or actually acting within, and being forced to survive there, fighting for their life, is definitely something right up my alley. At the start, that seems to be what this story is all about, and the opening is strong - setting up the basics of the world, the situation our character is in, and a seemingly insurmountable foe, with unspeakable consequences should our protagonist lose. Of course, that's not quite what we get.
As a note, I did notice that the author mentioned they were a new writor in the author's notes throughout the story, and I have to say, I think almost all of the problems in this story stem from that inexperience. I said it above and I'll say it again, the beginning of this story is largely solid, and that's not an easy thing to do in writing, but the rest of the storywriting process itself takes a lot of practice too, and that is where this particular story falls short.
Before we get to looking at the story proper, though, let me go through the categories in order from least to most egregious.
Grammar:
The grammar in this story is good. It's not perfect, but it's certainly not to the level of anything distracting. Good job on this, poor grammar in a story is really a pet peeve of mine. It can go almost totally unnoticed if it's good, but if it's poor it can completely ruin a story on its own. Thankfully, this story doesn't fall victim to that particular pitfall.
Style:
The style of this story is also decent, though not quite as good as the grammar. I'm not a fan of the way the author separates sections of the story with periods, as well as the way that what should be the author's notes spill into the story section of the text proper both at the start and the end. There's a special box for it for a reason. The real problems though, are the sentences and perspective notation