Dawn of a Thousand Suns, Book I : Arch De Angels

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In the age of legends, no one was considered a mage without comprehending at least two barons’ magic. Belial - the king of fire, Azar - the remembrance of winter, Kaesh - the damnation of the world, and Orpheus - the prism of the soul. Four of them were the source of the ancient magic in the universe...

About two thousand years ago, at the culmination of the Great Ocean War, two more appeared, called Black and White Regads. After the ascension, known as La Shiva and Al Candra. What was four became six, and that completely altered the geometry of classical magic, as it is contemplated in the Treaty of the Gates...

Lucius, a twelve-year-old boy from the village, has suffered the loss of his family. His baby sister is the only thing that keeps him going, despite the haunting memories of the past. The orphans get separated, and she is placed in a shelter where a noble family buys her. In the company of his newfound friend Michael, Lucius resolves to break out of the foster home and save his sister. Though events unfold drastically, suddenly the entire city is in a state of catastrophe, everything is engulfed in a fiery hellfire, and dire creatures roam around terrorizing the townsfolk.

In a world where the old equilibrium is lost, unknown forces arise. Now the only goal for youngsters is to self-preserve. As the journey for survival begins, along the way, they will have to master new skills and confront the enemies they never imagined before, even in their most bizarre dreams. And the most challenging part will remain to avoid losing themselves in the process. As there is a thin line between fighting the monsters and becoming the one yourself...

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Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Ismail Akston

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Rating: 4.5/ 5.0
Followers: 18
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Chapters(32 total)

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AldoraRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
First off, I want to say that the description is astonishing; the writing is great but sometimes a little confusing. Scene setting is perfect, the narrative form is great, and everything that falls into the classic fantasy category has been handled masterfully. At the beginning, story development is a bit slow but in following chapters I couldn’t rest. It keeps you attached and intrigued. Although you have amazing descriptions first several chapters are a bit over described, so maybe trim it a little and add some more dialogues, it would be easier for the reader to follow the story.
CosmoseerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The story has an interesting premise that it delivers on pretty well. I've been enjoying Lucius's journey so far, and I'm intrigued to see how the prologue becomes relevant eventually. The writing style, at least for me, took a bit of getting used to but it got much smoother as the story progressed.
Story: Plot is building up pretty steadily. Things could be a little clearer, but that's more on the styyle. The premise is strong and the story hooks me to fnd out more.
Style: I had the most difficulty getting into the story's writing style, which was especially prevalent in the first chapter. It's the kind of writing that makes you pay attention to what's going on, which imo is a good thing once you get used to it. Most other technical areas are pretty solid, though I woud like some more descrptions ot ground me as a visual reader. I need to be able to picture stuff and that's a litle difficult sometimes. I enjoy the pacing ehre a lt though. Nothign overstays their welcome and the story beats along really well.
Grammar: Pretty solid. Some minor mistakes that a small proofread should fix.
Character: Michael seems like a decent, well-intentioned protagonist caught up in things far beyond him but mkaing the best of what he can. I'm also very intrigued by Lucius and his past. Hoping to see more of his sister too. All of them are children desperate to survive, and act accordingly.
Overall: This is a solid start. I'm trusting the premise in the blurb more than the story itself on what direction it's supposed to go. A little more on the fantasy aspects, like the magic and the monsters, would go a long way in making this even better. The conflict looks like it's poised right where it might escalate soon and I'm all for it. Definitely a big recommend.
James TadhgRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Dawn of a Thousand Suns is an interesting fantasy story with a lot of intriguing mysteries set up early on.
Story: Lucius is an an orphan who, along with his friends, witnesses and survives a vicious attack on their city. There's a very open ended feel to it and the author has plenty of direction to go in with a lot of characters to expand on.
Characters: All of them so far have something intirguing or mysterious about them and like the plot, the direction the author can take with them can vary a lot.
Grammar: Some awkward phrasing and incorrect uses of commas and odd dialogue tags, but for the most part the grammar is not a huge issue, and improves as the chapters go on.
Style: This is where I think the author should focus on. Much of what I've said above is buried beneath sometimes very very difficult to read paragraphs. While the characters are intriguing and the plot is interesting, you need to get beyond the way the story is written to enjoy it. I think the author should consider a rewrite after brushing up on how to get across what they're trying to say. Because they are trying to say quite a lot and ther's a very rich world here to be explored, but it needs to be reworked. Also the attack should happen much earlier, ideally by the end of the first chapter.
Overall, I think there's a lot of good here and definititely a diamond in the rough, but all of that excess needs to be cut away for it to shine.
KevinADavisRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Intriguing start! The first few chapters have been a strong introduction into an unusual culture and setting. There is much I don’t know about their culture yet.
Story: Movement has been slowly building over the first few chapters. The initial losses for Lucius are countered with a strange recall that I have yet to understand and haven’t followed well.
Style: The dialogue is solid. Pacing keeps a steady beat even through the action sequences in later chapters. More description would help to keep the setting clear. Adding in new understandings of the culture would help.
Grammar: I'm not skilled enough to identify the actual issues. I didn’t find many phrases that held me back.
Characters: Lucius and Michael have been my main exposure at this point. Both have been developing clearly. Their characters are young, so the flaws and assets simple and I’ve yet to see any direction in their arcs. I’m fine with this at this stage of the narrative.
Overall, a good read that I'd recommend. The magic system and culture seems complex and I look forward to learning more. The few chapters I've read have left a solid interest and a compelling conflict with Lucius, his sister, and Michael.
LabukaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Just wow! This is shaping up to be a great, amazing story line to follow. Even now, only 9 chapters in, it made me forget everything else I had to do.
5/5 grammar, minimum spelling errors.
4.5/5 Unothodox but decent style, beautifully written and described.
5/5 At first when I was on chapter 4-5, I've thought to give it maybe 4 stars, cause despite the fact that author descriptions a marvelous it still lacked some action and tension form me, but I'm lucky I continued reading. In following chapters the story developes further like an old tree roots, it sucks you in, like I just mentioned, it's tense and you can feel the action and flows in all the right ways. I'm not at ch 10 and I feel I;m reading two books simultaneously this world is vast and complex conclude. There's clearly been a lot of thought and care put into this story and the setting, and it shines. I'm really looking forward to learning more about the world and the characters.
4.5/5 Character. I love the characters. Also my recommendation will be that spend siem time to side characters as well not only main ones.
In conclusion, this is a sweet story, and I would heartily recommend it.
DrakoRemRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Disclaimer: This review is purely based on my perception of the book, which means it's very subjective, before making any definitive conclusions, give it a try first.
Grammar: The grammar's good, you might find some strangely worded sentences in this book, but I believe that it's the Author's choice so I definitely wouldn't count it as a mistake.
Style: Please note that it is my personal opinion, this story is beautifully and convolutedly written, and I'd say that it is the book's blessing and course at the same time, readers like me might find it a bit hard to focus and keep reading because of it. There were times when I got distracted and I would have to reread the paragraph to understand what is happening, but again, not everyone is like me. Read it and try to find out if you'll fall in love with this style or not. And probably it'll do some good if the book would have more dialogues, by using dialogues, the author will not show us more but also speed up the pace when it is needed.
Story: I rarely give bad marks for a story, because it's an author's vision, it can't be right or wrong, it just exists and it's up to the reader to decide. But I can say that I found the story very enticing, from the very beginning we have many questions, we want to know, what in the world happened, and there's no better story than the one that makes you question! I also felt all the groundwork done to write this story, the world-building is interesting and more unique than most of the books on RR have to offer.
Character: The characters are well written, and they have depth, but that's mostly true for the main characters, side characters feel more generic, and that is a pity because the main characters are like the main ingredients in a dish while the side characters are like spices that could make the dish more interesting.
Conclusion: All in all, it's a good book with an interesting story, you might find the style unusual, but don't overlook this book, give it a shot.
goshuniaRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
In this instance, I don't believe a thorough analysis of the plot or its various components is required: Although I respect the author's dedication more than the novel itself, I do suggest it. I like how the system has been set up, how the main character's strength is demonstrated by a very logical story element, and how the "big bad" is an event rather than a specific person.
kanundraRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Opening.
I’ve sent you something on the blurb as asked. Before I read the story, so there’s prob a lot I’d still change in that. You really need to focus on the journey of the orphans in the city, maybe not so much the rescue. It’s a very much slice of life, growing up story. Which is really nice to read.
Opening of this is pretty interesting, I admit I’m not a big fan of prologues, but it stands on its own and has purpose, as is the flashback. The story on the whole seems to have been updated a few times along the way with some additional chapters, which obviously means this story is very much a labor of love. 
Story.
A really nice slow burn fantasy, with lots of potential. Where we follow differing pov’s with Lucius and Michael in an orphanage and he’s whipped for misbehaving and then the two meet  to embark very much so on a journey to survive in a city that is full of obstacles.
Style.
There’s some beautiful descriptions, and the overall style is really good. I enjoyed seeing the world though the authors eyes. Which they’ve obviously spent a lot of time on, and is worth noting, that its alive and very easy to get into, despite the grammar/language oddities. Some of the paragraphs are longer than I’d like especially reading on my phone, but I managed.
Grammar.
While this is pretty easy to follow, there’s some odd tags and phrasing that stands out throughout the chapters I’ve read. - “Where am I?” asked him instinctively. – who is him? Lucius, I believe. Chapter 1. But it’s consistent enough that it does throw me off the story and gets in the way of full enjoyment. A line edit in here would not go amiss to smooth out the barriers and help a lot more for everyone. There’s just a few too many to point out.
Characters.
The characters all really do help here. I think Michael does stand out a little better than Lucius, but they complement each other, and have the sister in their best interests. The odd supporting character are a little stereotypical. The Foster Home’
BullerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
There are a few things about this story that I don't really like. One of those would be the use of italics. Most of the time, it isn't used at all. But when its used, it just doesn't stop. I get that its meant to work as a sort of separation from the rest of the content, but I just couldn't get behind it.
Anyway, the rest is pretty decent. The grammar is okay, the plot seems pretty interesting. Did have a problem with the talking, but not enough that I was angry about it. 4.5/5
Scholar_GirogiRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Dawn of a Thousand Suns starts of strong and has a good hook of a premise. A fine work of fantasy that should keep the readers entertained.
Style: A few paragraphs were a bit chunky and could do with some splitting up. Other than that, the prose is decently crafted and flows well, and I can immerse myself easily. Still, it could use a once-over.
Story: The story is pleasantly grabbing. The author put a lot of time and passion into crafting the world. Since its quite character-focused, it is understandably slow-paced. But I like that for this kind of work. It works well and is captivating.
Grammar: I didn't find anything that was glaring to my eyes. I had an enjoyable read grammar-wise. Still, there were rare instances where it was a bit janky with some phrasing and punctuation.
Character: The story shines here with the characters. Michael is an intriguing character with definable flaws that make him a joy to read. I enjoyed reading about how he interacts with characters like Lucius. Their backstories were pulling; I expect much as they grow through further writing.
Overall, this story is a rough gem. But underneath that thin layer of dirt is something wonderfully beautiful. I hope the author comes back and does a little pruning on the chunky paragraphs, otherwise, well done!