Colossus' Dream

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Description

An ancient elemental is awoken in a time that is not his own. He sets off to finally complete the dream he has always had. Armed with the chance granted to him by the strange new system, he will set off on a journey throughout the ages.

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Status: Completed
Year: 2017
Author: Danetello

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Rating: 4.5/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(10)

VenomRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I'm currently bige reading the completed novel.
something new (for me) a short book to read.
i'm not a very artistic person to say the least............but dear author the poems in the interlude are very well written
ChaChaSwitchRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is a light hearted story with a bit more serious underlying theme, loneliness and searching for a purpose. We follow a "tiny" earth Colossus throughout time and his goal of becoming massive. As the story progresses we see the World around him develop, and become more alive. Though there is barely any character development, All characters introduced are well thougth out, and let us see the World from a mortals perspective.
Highly recommended.
MarkParkRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The story is quite nice and I enjoy it very much. There are no glaring errors with the story and I feel that the pacing of the story is good - thus far as of chapter 28. There's always something new each chapter and the story isn't stagnant and repetetive. The grammar is good as well, only some small mistakes here and there, which the author often fixes if you point it out to him/her in the comment section. If you are interested in the premise of the story I hope you start reading with a fresh state of mind, as the litrpg is a little different from most stories. I would definitely recommend the book to anyone whom may find themselves reading this short review.
NekohtRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is a great and super interesting story
I can't really say anything else, but that it's a fact that I love it.
The Colossus is a very interesting "person"/elemental.
Please keep up the good work Danetello
=^.^= I'll be waiting for the next chapter =^.^=
ShakeelRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Amazing story. But slow on releases but it's great and definitely worth a read. Its one of only a few stories that I can say will be completed and not be dropped midway through it.
I wrote this months ago but forgot to click submit................
TheLoneOneRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
From Beggining to end it runs smoothly and there is barely a moment of unexcitment (boy i cant spell tonight), basically its a great story and you should read it(first story i gave five stars too)
MZeroRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Great story loved how compact it is and how MC perceives time is quite interesting. Give it a shot it's a good story and not something that is common, that you may have read before. The pace of the story is great but depending on the individual they might not be the case but I like it. The way the MC acts not so human-like is great but not too much that you don't understand where they come from.
PeppermancerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The lovely author has kindly asked me to update my review. I have kept the old review at the bottom of this for posterity's sake for any who wish to read it. I have re-read the entire story in one sitting, and am happy to say that the author has improved by quite a large margin.
My favorite parts of this story are still the prologue, and now the new poem in the interlude between chapters 21 and 22. They bring a sense of majesty and granduer to the story that is befitting to it's topic, the Colossus! But, chapters 1-10 I still think are the weakest part of this story. That is understandable though, as they are the beginning, and thus the author was still learning. They flip-flop between POV's too often, and are lacking the detail needed to really understand the world and its inhabitants. Luckily, chapters 11-22 greatly improve on this, with chapter 22 being his best work so far.
I think the style of your writing, your voice, has greatly improved. It feels like you have a handle on how to write your story the way you like it and want it now. Zhon has a character now, Col has a character now. Your descriptions of the massive events that happen around the characters is wonderful, and even your descriptions of the environment really draw me in. But there are a few things that I think could be improved. I'm glad that you've really cut down on your POV shifting, but I still feel like some POV's are just too short. I think each one needs to be a minimum of 5 paragraphs. Not only will this help us learn about each character more, but since we get to see so many things from different perspectives it can give you a chance to make their relationships more complex. The other thing I think could use a little bit of work is pace. It is drastically slowed down in these most recent chapters, but I still think this was a bit too fast. The journey to the volcano in the center of the continent should have been more grand. It felt like less of the first journey between Col and his etern
EmilyEvelanRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Review at Chapter 41
Style (4): If anyone has read Vocaloid's rock story, it's pretty similar at the start. Later on, it gets more action, but not much more. It's a relaxing novel.
Story (4/5): This novel is almost like the diary and slice of life-ish. Only at the end is there some semblance of a conflict that doesn't get immediately solved. There's the portal and everything, but meh. There's foreshadowing and mystery about greater forces which makes it interesting. The creation story is also quite original compared to most LitRPGs, since it actually justifies the system.
Grammar (3.5/5): This includes grammar, punctuation, and spelling. You improved a lot since the beginning. One of the biggest improvements is the separation of dialogue from different characters. However, as the earlier chapters are not fixed, I can't give any more points.
Character (4/5): The characters are interesting. The main character, Col, can be summed up as simple, ambitious and loyal, maybe kind too. The main reason is because all he's been doing is evolving the entire time. He does show emotion for his separation, though.
Zohn is more developed. He goes from an ambitious and selfish man to someone willing to help his friend even if he must be lonely. However, he is still unwilling to interact with a lot of people, given his hermit status even after running into Dawkins.
Personal Enjoyment (4): It's a good read. Howevr, it feels extremely rushed. Each age is undeveloped. While you can say that's not the point, it doesn't change that it's a lot of waste potential that I would've liked to see realized.
Overall (3.9): The average of the five above. Rounded up to a 4.
BochinatorRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
Colussus' Dream got me hooked from the first chapter. It's a hilarious story with a ridiculously OP character. The plot is great and I love Col and Zohn's great adventure. But the ending... was pretty unsatisfying. The hype kept building up for this epic battle where Col shows the world his true power... and then doesn't. So, definitely read it, but don't expect a fully satisfying ending.