City dungeon

Self-Published

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Description

A fan of Simcity gets hit by lightning and thrown on a new world with the body of a dungeon core. But he doesn't want to be an evil, soul eating monster master but building his own city. And so he becomes a city dungeon.

PS: I'm not a native speaker so have some mercy on me

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2017
Author: Iranueel

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.1/ 5.0
Followers: 1,512
Views: 917,801

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Community Reviews(10)

magical heartRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
this is a very enjoyable story I look forward to it is contoured at some point.
stadsRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
like the idea of a city core will be fun to see what he builds do wonder how he is going to change the humans we can kind of be mean
do hope with the battle done he can go back to city building with crazy idea's
TasonRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
Style: interesting flow to each chapther and a nice bit of information in most chapters.
Story: a theme that's been used a lot of late but this ones got another kind of twist not used before, so in this its a first of its kind.
A city dungeon with different abilities and possibilities. Yeah, its a first and pretty darn interesting so far. I look foreword to each new chapter of this authors work.
Grammar: grammar is just fine, with a few minor errors here and there that usually always manage to slip past but otherwise it is clear in its meaning and even when you come acrossed an error most shouldn't have any trouble understanding what the author was actually saying in those spots.
If I remember reading correctly, english is not this authors main language so doing this good is impressive to me, especially with how much the english language can be confusing with all of its minor spots and kicks that come around for those that don't grow up speaking it, and even then for some of us who did grow up with it.
Character: ok, the characters are good and flow nicely so far. Development of each one slowly progresses and occasionaly jumps a bit more but the flow is good and clear. Nice thing about this story is that there are more characters slowly coming up and each one is nicely worked so far. Looking foreword to there growlth and any news characters that may come up down the road.
A young story but one with a very nice twist to an original theme and the possibilities are great and large. So far this author has done very nicely in most if not all areas and I know I enjoy finding new chapters each time they come out.
Thank you for the story and your work.
Patrick DuffyRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
very different from the standard dungeon core type - city core is a very unique and the first to implement a dungeon core type as something to help the local population. very good read has a lot of potential going forward.
Soria VoitkRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I apologize for the review I left some time ago. I have now re-read some chapters now, and i can confidently say that I was too childish and harsh.
I was new to RoyalRoad and webnovels in general, and hadn't really read that much at all since the Donald Duck & co. comics as a child.
I don't think i took into consideration that he is actually only 29 years old, and (relatively) quite new to life to be honest. I didn't even think abiut the fact that he was a CITY dungeon at the time of reviewing. Which literally means that he will be creating a city for people to live in!
This story is way more coherent than I remembered, and definitely way better. Even though MC is a city dungeon, he does make quite a few critical mistakes (in my opinion), such as sharing too much information about the Guardian, himself and what he can do.
I do feel that he is a bit too immature in the first meeting with his first settlers. Even though MC had been single all his life, and was actively trying to get someone into his life, he did feel a bit too fake there at meeting the princess.
Magic is pretty nice, and seems believable. I can definitely see how it could possibly work, and it makes sense in that dungeons are not imposibly strong at start. Though it is a bummer that the Goddess locked his understanding behind certain information from his old world.
All in all, I certainly enjoy reading it now. Especially compared to before when I was mostly looking for dungeon core and reincarnated as a monster novels.
I hope this review comes forth better than my previous. Please do not take my previous review to heart. :,-(
Have good one :-) !
Old review:
Old Review Title:
"The MC feels fake"
Old ratings:
Style 2.5
Story 3
Grammar 2.5
Character 2.5
Old Review:
The protagonist is one of the weakest i've ever read about on RR, not in the sense of how strong he is physically, but mentally.
He keeps literally ZERO secrets from others and even tells his real name and that he reincarnated to the first be
MeteRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
This story provides a good balance of plot/technical aspects (e.g. power growth, descriptions of magical plants being made) and character interaction (talking to side characters).
This story's main pitfalls are a tendency toward sexist portrayals of female characters (e.g. women are all schemers and a character is a schemer because she's a woman rather than because it's a unique character trait or something resulting from her past) and a tendency for the story to - even with a single chapter - state that a character knows something and then later have the character express shock at learning that same fact or something easily derivable from it for the sake of drama.
DarkereRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I actually forgot about this story for a few days and then saw it on the leaderboards and was really surprised that I forgot to bookmark the story. I was really interested in the story and remembered that I really liked the idea behind it.
The flaws appear however very fast and turn this one from must read to read when you have a good imagination and can bear bad storytelling.
Bad pacing already throws you off in the first chapters as the protagonist is thrown into his new world. Instead of experiencing his surrounding and learning about the world, he is immediately approached by some local elves then supported by them quickly creates his first community.
Fast pacing is something that you get used to reading on this site and is pretty consistent throughout the story so that it doesn't distract from reading to much.
What really makes it hard to read is the dialog. Or I guess I should call them two-way monologs? Most important conversations consist of 10 line explanation blocks that are thrown at the other party.
I had/still have hopes for improvement as this is something every new author has to learn and I have seen some but the latest chapter (ch.28) felt like he would prefer quantity over quality. (the author mentioned the chapter was rushed )
gnarlytreemanRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
It's kind of been done before. Most dungeon stories eventually end up city, or world building sims. The mc speaks too simply, and sometimes the motivations are a little too simple.
With level gain stories, getting overpowered too quick tends to cause plot fizzle, and detach story element importance. This almost happens with this one in chapter 13, and the polls left after the fix also leave the reader aware something was fixed. I'm kinda happy there is a plot element nerf bat.
The sentance structure composition is too broken up, as are most royal road paragraphs, please concentrate on longer ones.
Overall i rated the story a little better just because i liked it, and the writer is learning pretty quick.
Sanity ClauseRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Very unusual idea, a city core instead of a dungeon. I've not seen this done before, this author may be the first. I'm enjoying it.
Sadly, it appears that the author never goes back and reads what he's typed, nor does he ask someone with language skills to proofread it. The grammar/punctuation are terrible, although the vocabulary is quite good.
OwlishRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
Interesting idea, not bad grammar, but the style of writing is kind of boring. Lots of paragraphs start with a statement, then a character speaks in run on sentences.