Child of Ash and Flame
Self-Published
Community Rating
Description
How would you feel if you discovered your mum had lied to you and was really a magical being from another realm?Sixteen-year-old Claire finds out when her beloved brother, Marcus, is snatched away to her mother’s magical homeland, Kelnarium.Discovering both she and her brother have inherited fire magic, Claire is unable to leave Marcus to his fate and follows him into this new realm.But her desire to reunite with Marcus soon becomes a deadly quest. Kelnarium will explode unless Claire does something to close the Rift, a chasm in the sky forged by civil war. With time so short and enemies of magic everywhere, can Claire save Kelnarium and find a way home?She has to try …
Information
- Status
- Completed
- Year
- 2022
- Author
- Dweomeroflight
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.5/ 5.0
- Followers
- 60
- Views
- 23,968
Chapters(42 total)
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Community Reviews(1)
- LiteraryWhoRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0This is a right proper story and it's a shame it hasn't found its audience here on RR. I'll try to break down my review into a "For Reader" section, and then something for the writer.
To start, should you read this?
If you like fantasy adventure stories with a tight plot that will reach their conclusion before the last star burns from the sky? Then yes, absolutely.
The prose is well done, and carries you pleasantly through the story with little issue. The author is definitely from the "functional" school or writing, and so you won't find the delightful cadence and character from something like a Terry Pratchett novel, but that isn't a bad thing. When a writer without the requisite charm tries to pull that off, it bogs down the story in superfluous verbiage (and is often just a crutch trying to prop up otherwise weak characters and plot).
Instead, this story simply uses its prose to convey the strength of its plot, characters, and world-building.
I'm going to treat the "Grammar" category as the more general "Technical" one, or perhaps "Composition" would be more apt. In any case, the skill and general polish of the writing is acceptable, although an experienced reader/writer is bound to notice places where additional polish would help things flow better.
The Story (and world building) are the strongest parts, and the author does a good job of weaving all the elements together into an interesting plot. It's not that you'll be much surprised by anything (I wasn't), but you'll appreciate how everything comes together in the end. The magic and setting were well integrated into the plot, and successfully avoided any obvious points where you could say, "Why didn't they just X that out of the way?" That's always nice.
The Characters are also well done, especially the MC Claire who we get to watch grow from a somewhat annoying, whiny, wimp, into a respectable and competent girl. She does start off as a bit of a dunce, but is never grating and starts her growth arc q