C.C. (Previous Version)

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2021

Author

Maverick26

• Chapter 2: New World
  Apr 6, 2021
• Chapter 1: New Day
  Apr 5, 2021

Reviews

Community Reviews(6)

• MystiqueRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  If you enjoy watching Anime or reading manga you'll probably enjoy this story. I agree with previous reviewed, this story has a very anime-esque feeling to it. This story definitely reads as a draft, it's a bit rough around the edges. But the author has a very good idea here, it just needs a bit of shaping to really make it shine.
  Style: The style is pretty good. Overall not too hard to read. There is a noticeable issue of telling, rather than showing. Which can make fast paced scenes a bit clunky to read. However these are easily fixed issues and don't detract overall from the story itself. So 4.5/5 stars.
  Story: Overall a very good plot here. I enjoy the world, both the 'mundane' and the magical. The author has created an intriguing world that really makes you want to explore it. This story very much fall under the "Normal boy accidentally falls into magical world and has to frantically try to get stronger to survive this new world" which is a popular trope for a reason. Who doesn't dream of being dragged out of the monotony of a normal life and into one's full of swords and sorcery?
  Grammar: I do approach grammar scores with the understanding that RR writers do not have access to professional editors or proof readers. I only drop points if it drags me out of immersion. Which a few things did. There's a reoccurring issue with run on sentences and comma splices through the story. These are easily fixed however so it's not a giant issue. 4/5
  Characters: the characters are pretty interesting. Personally I find the side characters more interesting than the MC but that can happen with me. My only issue is that the MC occasionally knows more than is reasonable. But the characters are all very fleshed out and intriguing with their own separate personalities and quirks. 4.5/5
  Overall this is a good story. With a small bit of revision and editing in the future I believe the author can make it far. They have a true gem on their hands here.
• S.N. KeirsteadRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Style: The narration is very "to the point." While some descriptions and explanations are present throughout the story, the majority of the wring dictates exactly what is happening and how it unfolds. Although, there is still some room for improvement in the way the sentences are structured and how dialogue is handled (more on that later). Not hard to read at all, but could definitely be cleaned up with a second read through.
  Grammar: Grammar is legible but could use some tweaking. Punctuation can be off at times and some words/terms are a bit redundant in the same sentence. Far from the worst I've seen, but like the style there is room for improvement.
  Story: Personally, I think the story is right up my alley. It's different from the usual fantasy fair. There's a sci-fi, futuristic world with a fantasy thrown in. That alone sets it apart from other stories on this site. The world is ridden with monsters that the characters must fight, giving the story a futuristic urban fantasy feel that isn't seen too often in fiction. Action is fast and extravagant. Expect epic battles pretty early on.
  Character: Allen and Nera are the stars of the story. Their relationship is pretty standard (not a bad thing at all though). Allen is the "new guy" that's learning the ropes while Nera has confidence and the skills to back it up. Their dialouge exchanges are witty and strong. I think their relationship and conversations are the high points of the story; their personalities play off each other very well. They come off as believable, but most importantly, fun. Some of the dialogue can come across as somewhat stiff (like they're saying something just to advance to the next plot point), but it's rare and easily overlooked.
  Overall: Definite recommend. The art put in the chapters for some of the characters is excellent and helps to bring them to life vividly. If you're a fan of action, give this one a try!
• raven325Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  An exhilarating journey of courage and resilience! This captivating tale weaves intricate plotlines, vibrant characters, and breathtaking landscapes into a seamless tapestry of adventure. With every twist and turn, the story grips your heart, leaving you yearning for more. A must-read for all fantasy enthusiasts!
  From the very first page, this book casts a spell that keeps you enthralled until the very end. The author's skillful storytelling brings the characters to life, and their emotional depth leaves a lasting impact. The world-building is rich and immersive, transporting you to a realm of wonder and intrigue. A truly captivating masterpiece
• EricaABlairRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Style: The author has a great grasp on how to incorporate literary devices, and there is a good mix of dialogue and description. However, there were some interesting choices that forced me to reread certain sentences. Instead of:
  The shout had come from a young woman who looked to be Allen's age which was eighteen years old.
  Change it to:
  The shout had come from a young woman who looked to be Allen's age—eighteen.
  Or:
  The shout had come from a young woman who looked to be Allen's age, eighteen.
  Story: I’m really liking the story so far. As many people have already mentioned, it reminds me of anime due to how the characters move during fight scenes, the banter, and how the tone can shift within seconds. I’m definitely interested in reading more and seeing how Norse mythology plays a role.
  Grammar: The grammar does need a bit of work. While the author has a great repertoire of vocabulary words, the extra punctuation marks and dialogue spacing (for example, there should be a new line when another character is speaking, and if the same character is speaking, then you should not add a new line or you should not use a closing quotation mark) become distracting.
  Character: The characters so far are all distinctive. Allen seems to be a normal guy trying to get through life when he’s thrown into the middle of supernatural chaos. He also has some good philosophical ideas:
  “Of course not, fairness isn’t an absolute, it’s the goalline.”
  Yes, Allen, I agree. The only thing I still wonder about is what Allen’s motivation is.
  Overall, I think that the author is a talented writer and this is a promising story. The only thing I would recommend is that the author go back to the technical basics when it comes to paragraph structure and punctuation, but otherwise, keep up the good work!
• XanalourumRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Style & Grammar: The only real issues I have are in the Style and Grammar department. It may have been the intention but the story reads somewhat like a Light Novel. Can't place a finger on why, but it gives off that vibe for some peculiar reason. As for the Grammar, you can frequently spot mistakes and those can be jarring. However, the author's doing his best to fix it, which is quite apparent because he's edited the mistakes that others have pointed out. Would definitely benefit from turning on Reader Suggestions (or whatever its accurate name is) so it can be easily pointed out.
  Character: While the characters themselves have distinct personalities, some of the dialogue can come off as outlandish and unnatural, making their characterization seem a little bit cheaper. For the most part, though, it's great and you can get a grasp of their personalities. Allen is a relatable character for many, I am sure, but as stated before, the dialogues can be a bit off-putting (and some of the things he says at the beginning of the story are a tad bit unrealistic).
  Story: First of all, it's an Urban Fantasy that doesn't seem too outlandish and that's a big plus. It's somewhat similar to an anime, and that may be a good thing for some and a bad thing for others. I am of the latter category, but I don't hate it. The concept is great, though. Allen's interest in the magical side of the world is understandable and natural, so there's that.
• MalevolenceMauRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  A story about a man moving to a new city full of technology that also holds within it a world of dangerous fog filled with monsters.
  Style: The beginning sections jump forward in time a lot, setting up a small portion of the MCs background and then his current situation. With little in-between and explanations that are held much later it can feel a bit strange as you read along. Mostly third-person, with inner monologues from the MC.
  Grammar: Reading like it's a mix between US and UK styles, the author uses periods and commas both inside and outside their speech, with plenty of seech swapping between single or double quotation marks. A few sentences are missing some adjectives or nouns, making the reading lose its flow or break down completely.
  Story: Following what seems to just be Allen's perspective, the story is told to use like a fish-out-of-water. Plenty of explanations are given to him, though some must be learn side-by-side with his allies as not all is obvious. The story reads like a very slow burn, only one day or so passing in the current 7 chapters aside from the prologue. The powers at play are very simple with no number crunching or status screens, they just do what they do with difference in power described during combat.
  There isn't enough right now to get a full grasp of how the story will go, but it is intriguing with the paths it could take. It does remind me a bit of Accel World with the world hopping and powers between them.
  Character: There isn't much to go on right now but Allen is a straight-forward guy who was bored with his old life and moved into a boring job. Excitment is thrown his way with this talk of magic and underworld. A bit of anime-inspiration can be seen in dialogue and actions, from rubbing/scratching heads to some common trope lines. Each character has a succinct description so you can visualise them, but isn't overly in-depth to get lost in the words.