Businessman reincarnated in fantasy novel

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I died by the mistake of god, as a compensation in my second life I got reincarnated in the novel I read last night with immense powers,As family of my favourite character my grandfather.The most powerful person in the entire kingdom whom the king want to remove. I don't want his end like original story, but I have commoners blood will I be able to win favour of my grandfather?With the ultimate goal to rule the nation witness journey of businessman.

By author : sam

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Status: Completed
Year: 2022
Author: Sam-kun

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Rating: 3.1/ 5.0
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librarysmilesRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
This is the story of a guy that is transferred into a novel to be close to a character he admires, the duke of Britannia, who is fated to die without realizing the dream of continuing the family legacy. Thankfully the main character exists to make the duke's hope a reality.
I typically enjoy this type of simple weak to strong wish-fulfillment story, but there is one glaring fatal flaw.
Here is a quote from chapter 3 to see if you can spot the problem.
'edward say that with shocked face.”Ha-ha-ha, Yes there is no doubt in it that Leon has inherited the dragon’s will, finally after a long time things in Britannia are going to takeLeon new turn.I can’t wait to what the little one[Leon] will bring on table, ha-ha-ha” duke said.”'
If you guessed "grammar" then you get a prize! Here, have an internet cookie. 🍪
Spaces are needed after every period. All names should be capitalized. There shouldn't be a need to use bracketed names. Verb tenses should agree. Paragraphs are needed. A lot of work is necessary to make this story more legible.
Dream ElixirRoyal Road
★★ 1.5
I believe this could have been a potential good read. I can put up with extremely poor grammar, but this takes the cake. It is clear it was made with AI, which is no problem. But it doesn't seem to have been read through even once after creation. Simple things like "He said in his mind" (over and over again) could be changed to "he thought". Keeping the tenths consistent. Having sentences with words that actually make sense when put together. Yes you can understand what the author is getting at but the flow is like walking into a door every time you change rooms. It is unfortunate because I enjoy the premise. It could have been good. But for sanity sake I just can't.
I hope the author reviews it as I would like to read it once edited.