I woke up in a strange new place and learnt that I had sacrificed my memories for a powerful gift during my transmigration to another world. I guess all I can do is to build up my army...using my smartphone.

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FanficNEO1123Royal Road

★★★ 3.0

It's not a story that you would sing praises about or hold in high regard but it's a good starting story for any writer.
I am giving this a 3 star as the story has a consistent direction the author wants to progress.
Our MC feels just like any standard Western Isekai protagonist but the other side characters need a bit more development.
Development can be achieved by writing detailed actions or more POV from these individuals.
The story feels like it's flying too fast though... Put more details into the transpiring events and avoid general 3rd person POV unless you are skipping time.

HerrDanyuRzhankaRoyal Road

★★★ 3.0

Is this the end? No new chapters? Are you dead?
It's indeed a good read, though not by much. A light read to be honest. It's amateurish but bearable and interesting. It's a good escape, however, thirty chapters is not enough.
I hope that series can continue. It's one of those stories that help you escape reality and adds another good feeling on your soul. Not many are quite like it.

anaustralianwriterRoyal Road

★★★ 3.0

The story isn't bad by any means, but it isn't exactly good either. There is little to no direction other then 'Make contry' which by the latest chapter, 25, is already completed in all but name. The MC is literally a nameless, memoryless blank sheet of paper with no real depth other then slavery is bad. They have no real personality at all and could be replaced with the robots that serve him. The MC has been in this world for a few weeks and is already the strongest force in the world. Yet, instead of doing anything with this armed force, they only react to what others are doing. The only time this isn't the case is when meeting two nobles and getting them to join his kingdom.
The writing is ok. A few spelling mistakes or grammar errors. Nothing that couldn't be fixed with a tight comb of the work. The author defentally has a strong grasp on what writing should look like, but clearly either lacks the experience to make it interesting, or the motivation to. Overall, it's a fine beginer story. Nothing that would sell thousands of novels or anything, but a great base to practice the authors skills and become a great writer. It seems like they have a strong grasp of the military side of writing, but needs practice on the personality side.
I can honestly say I'd like to see this author stick with this story and use it as a springboard into something better. Use this story to practice your writing and ideas and in a year I could see you writing something fantastic. All you need is a bit of practice.

Building An Army In Another World With My Smartphone

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