Building A Sect Through Revenge (Grimdark Fantasy-Magic Meets Cultivation)

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Description

Jal is the illegitimate daughter of the Northern Duke, Oscar Amber. Born to a dancer from the nomadic Kala tribe, her striking pink hair sets her apart from the rest of her black-haired family—a constant reminder that she does not belong. After years of struggling to prove herself, her life is brutally cut short.

But death is not the end.

Reborn with the memories of her past life, Jal faces a choice: retrace the same path and fight for a different outcome or carve a new one entirely. Yet fate has other plans. Her return comes with unforeseen consequences, ones she never could have predicted.

There is always a price for second chances—but this time, Jal refuses to be the only one who pays.

Release schedule: Mon-Fri at 9:05 am. It's Est if that means anything to you. I live in Jamaica and daylight saving and time zones mess me up.

What to expect:

- Chapter length 1800-3500 words

- Weak to Strong MC (She's a bit pathetic at the start/someone left a comment so I thought I should be up front about what to expect.)

- System (He's sentient and got his own thing going on.)

- No Romance

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2025
Author: Blaise Sawers

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Rating: 4.5/ 5.0
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Community Reviews(6)

Steve RockRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
The prose is excellent, the schemes are interesting, and the writing is solid. This story does a great job setting up mysteries and slowly putting the pieces together in a way that keeps the reader at the edge of their seats. The characters are multi-dimensional and interesting, if largely grim and amoral. It earns that grimdark tag, let me tell you.
It's definitely a slow burn, but I can already see the story going in an interesting direction. For those with a bit of patience who enjoy Grimdark fantasy, this is worth looking into.
WeavervaleRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Let me start off this review with a very heavy warning: this has very dark elements up front that the tags do not adaquetly prepare you for. If you have ever been a parent or wanted to have kids this is not the fic for you. This does not affect the review but I have know people that have experienced loss and they would be up in arms.
Grammar: prose was fine. 5/5
Style: 4/5 this is written in first person present tense which is a strong choice. I am not mad about that. The problem that I am seeing is the usage of narrative summary where we have her relate stuff to us but then do not get to experience it. This plus too many explanations. Still it stands well.
Okay I have it. Brevity. This could use more brevity in prose.
Character 5/5. I do not know someone who would have a child and not have a name or several ready for them. This struck me as odd and specific enough that it really sticks in my mind. Something about the psychic distance is off and I want to see more character (big C).
Story: 5/5 in chapter 6 and it hasnt really started... so maybe start on chapter 7
jDjRoseRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Had fun reading and I must say that I am loving the characters interacting. Story that set up mysterious as good as this should be praised for their excellent story telling. I feel like this will stand out from the rest in the grimdark, and be considered as one of the best
Nomad's TaleRoyal Road
★★★★★ 4.5
The passage describes a woman’s journey through a dark, rainy, and muddy landscape as she carries her bundle close to her chest. The author uses vivid descriptions of the physical environment to create a sense of urgency and danger that the protagonist is facing. The woman’s journey is full of physical and emotional pain, as she struggles to keep moving despite her injuries and exhaustion. The protagonist is haunted by the memory of her son who had passed away, and the guilt of not being able to protect him. She finds refuge in a dilapidated altar in a temple, where she lays her son’s body. The passage portrays the protagonist's emotional turmoil and grief as she struggles to find meaning and purpose in a world that has been cruel to her. The use of short, simple sentences, and descriptive language create a sense of immediacy and urgency that pulls the reader into the story. The author’s skillful use of sensory language, such as the sound of the rain and the feel of the mud, allows the reader to experience the protagonist's journey as if they were there. The passage is a poignant reminder of the pain and suffering that people endure in life. It highlights the human capacity for resilience in the face of tragedy, and the power of love to provide comfort in times of grief. In conclusion, the passage is a well-written and emotionally charged description of a woman's journey through a dark and dangerous landscape as she tries to find a resting place for her son. The author's use of vivid imagery and sensory language creates a compelling and immersive narrative that captures the reader's attention from start to finish.
blessedjuniperRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
I would rate higher if some pieces to the story was not missing. Where is the rest? So far this novel is actually good, but it stopped at too few chapters. Is the author still working in this novel? Is there another website I can finish reading this on? Please update more when you get the chance to. It is quiet interesting, though annoying that the chapters are short and stopped where it had. Is there a weekly update or monthly update?
JuneauRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
I tried to stick it out. The idea of getting a system, which wants to give you cultivation powers in a magic world. With rebirth is genuinely interesting.
Except I'm what.. 20 chapters in and it's just confusing, far from complete and I've not seen a single bit of magic, cultivation system use besides a couple of screens or... well... anything really. Not much of anything has happened.
I give up.
The scene transitions and use of language are making it so hard for me to figure out when we're in the present or in a memory.
I cant work out if the MC remembers everything or just snippets. Is she platying the young idiot. Or actually just an idiot.
If she were 40 when she died. Why are her knees knocking now. Why is she worried and confused. She's lived a life by now.
Alround. There is huge potential for the actual story but the writing and pacing is seriously letting it down.
Good luck with your story. It's not for me.