Beta Test
Self-Published
Community Rating
Description
I'm sure I'm in for some colorful criticism, But if even a few people enjoy this, I'd be happy. As of right now the story is set in Delaware around 2005'ish'. A young man from the streets, aquires a beta test invitation in an unorthodox way. The plan is to have a comical adventure in an experimental virtual reality game. I can easily transition it to a full story if its well received. If not I hope atleast one person kinda likes it.
P.s. This is a work of fiction, with made up characters. Any likeness iscoincidence.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2019
- Author
- bruno237
Tags
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.2/ 5.0
- Followers
- 29
- Views
- 21,410
Chapters(32 total)
- Not a new chapter, more like a PSAApr 6, 2023
- 30. Take the money and run.Feb 20, 2020
- 29. GD ninja'sFeb 12, 2020
- 28. Hidden QuestFeb 5, 2020
- 27. Radiant flowersJan 28, 2020
- 26. Stranger DangerJan 20, 2020
- 25. Two HoursJan 9, 2020
- 24. Travel PointJan 7, 2020
- 23. Highest CasualtiesJan 1, 2020
- 22. Fallen party membersDec 30, 2019
- 21. They're NPC's, if they die... who cares?Dec 25, 2019
- 20. Troll'dDec 25, 2019
- 19. Goblin villageDec 23, 2019
- 18. Old progamming and all thatDec 21, 2019
- 17. The magical lobby tanning glitchDec 20, 2019
- 16. CampDec 19, 2019
- 15. PvPDec 18, 2019
- 14B. InterludeDec 16, 2019
- 14. Maybe one dayDec 14, 2019
- 13. The TribunalDec 13, 2019
Reviews
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Community Reviews(3)
- IAmNotAWizardRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0I really want more chapters and I love how Bruno acts. Bruno has awesome pickup lines that I think all us men should use. I love how Casey reacts to his flirting. Bruno's pov adds to Casey's reaction by leaving her reactions to his imagination.
- TheBreakernewRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0tl:dr overall:
This is a pretty damn good story. Besides needing some reformatting for the paragraphs to include more white-space and an overuse of comma's, this is a very fun read.
Style:
The style very personable and I got sucked into the atmosphere as I was reading. The flow of the story is also very good, and as an adaptation from a short story to a longer format I'd call it a success!
Story:
The plot is interesting and egaging, and it lends itself to the mystery of who the MC is testing the tech for and what kinds of consequences it will have for the future.
Grammar:
The grammar is very good, other than using more comma's than strictly necessary and needing more white-space for paragraphs it's great.
Plus I have to mention the dedication to transferring street speak into a format that I find extremely humours to read.
Character's:
The character's are the real draw for this story, especially the main character and his brother. Their interaction always bring a smile to my face and I'm reminded of interaction's I have with my friends.
You really belive the character's are where their from and have had past experiences outside of this story, which fit their backstories well. - tibultmerc448Royal Road★★★★★ 5.0This story started out rough, like its grammar and format. It had an interesting story though. I liked the characters a lot and its originality too. Its serious at times and then funny like a parody at other times. I would recommend it.