An Anomaly's Life Inside A Galge is Seriously too harsh for me!

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Description

"Im the only one who knows the truth of this World"

Hitose Matsuri, A boy who had everything in life

Money

Knowledge

Fame

Power

Looks...

but there was a single thing he was lacking......Women!

as he thought of a fast way to learn and Communicate with them

He Learned the Existence of the Sub Genre of Video Games Called [Dating Sims]

lavishly spending time on his newfound hobby

with this newly bought Galge of his-[Constantine:Le Rhapsodia] as he was just about to start the playthrough-

*bang*

the sound of a loud gunshot was the last thing he had heard but...

for last thing that he had remembered...

it'was a click of a button

*Click*

[Load New Game]

waking up inside the game he didn't know what he was for sure

but he...

thought of himself as something...

An Anomaly, something different, abnormal, peculiar, or not easily classified, something anomalous...He became an unknown character

[Gray Dè Bernardò]

an anomaly had Come forth but witnessed by no one....

had just entered this World

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Update!

Yall may want to visit my twitter acc, there are news, updates, arts for the characters lying there in wait so make sure to come and check it out!

@TenKoMatsuri

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2020
Author: Tendou Kiyotaka

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.4/ 5.0
Followers: 30
Views: 26,312

Chapters(31 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

NatsushigawaraRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
First of all I really like how you wrote the dialogue lines to not make them look long for the readers to not get lazed about when they are reading, I also like the simple words that can make you easily imagine/visualize to the things you pertain to
The story still needs to be more well wrote, its not bad but...well I can somehow wait for more of the whole world building develpment to concur while more chapters come, I also like the concept of this story having 2 protag's that came from the game which I think i haven't seen or read any novels like that yet
The grammar...there are some mispelled words and too much use of the asterisk so you better correct those while your readers are still little by little accumulating
For the characters, Im kinda excited to see what they would look like cause you said at the start 'they look fresh and new' was it? so maybe im asking for too much but if i see those cliched classic tropes for the heroines and other major characs im really gonna be dissapointed
I can tell you really though of their names and nobility particles through with research and effort, the latin-italian names also connects to the characters huh, like Princess bea I wonder what 'Flavo' meant so i searched it and it actually meant yellow which connects to her route Right? thats kinda cool.
All in all i really like it but your update time is really messy so if you could maybe fix the date when you post the new chapters and stuff on your twitter that would really help
Waiting for the next chapter update ☆-☆
HLoveRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
You can tell it was at least outlined, but the story is told so casually like your talking to your friend that it bugs me... The grammar mistakes are also a problem, but nothing that can't be fixed if he hires a proof reader... Hopefully my last point for now and in the future is how he tells things instead of shows them. This I see a lot on royal road so I expected as much already. Still it bugs me when you tell me instead of show me since it takes away from the immersion of the story. Either way it's still good enough to enjoy every other week as some junk food, but not good enough to put into your diet.
WlTCHRoyal Road
★ 1.0
Style: I presume English is not the author's first language based off of what I can read. Choppy, fast paced and generally confusing writing. Very odd and inconsistent formatting. It's closer to an outline written in a few minutes than proper prose, no offense. The character just "does some training off screen". This isn't a video game playthrough, you don't just go, "He did it offscreen somehow". The protagonist talks to us as if he's talking to a friend, and the style is erratic and inexplicable.
Story: The character becomes way too powerful way too quickly. He starts out "not even able to lift a dinner knife". After finding the village of exposition dump, a skinny, slender, and hungry child proceeds to do 50 push-ups and work out for an entire day. He literally passes out in middle of the woods from exhaustion, wakes up not sore whatsoever. His idea of a heart meal is some strawberries and water. He then jogs for an hour straight, does another 50 push-ups, and this small child says it was a "little tiring". His nutrition is nonexistent, subsisting of strawberries and water, yet he manages to overpower a giant boar after shredding his muscles for the past 2 days. The author then proceeds to skip an entire week, before saying that he is now at peak physical health. This is a nonsensical anime cheat power. "Hard work and training", mean nothing when you just say, "he did the thing off screen now here's his powerup". It reminds me of "In Another World With My Smartphone", and that's not a good sign.
Grammar: Punctuation is nearly nonexistent and basic sentence rules are defied. The start of sentences are nearly never capitalized, and paragraphs tend to be one long run-on sentence. Random words are capitalized ad-hoc, with no seeming rhyme or reason. There's an alleged "editor", but if they exist, they're not doing a very good job. In my opinion, the writing level is perhaps a particularly weeby 2nd or 3rd grader.
Character: The protagonist is the equivalent of Chuck