Alistair’s Great and Powerful Startup Dungeon

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2016

Author

IronBusinessSuit

• Chapter 2.3 - Take a look, it’s in a book, a Reading Rainbow!
  Jun 18, 2016
• Chapter 2.2 – A Leg Up and a Way Down
  Jun 17, 2016
• Chapter 2.1 – A Burning Tooth Ache
  Jun 16, 2016
• Chapter 2.0 – A Demon with a Plan
  Jun 15, 2016
• Chapter 1.3 – Carding isn’t just for Taverns
  Jun 13, 2016
• Chapter 1.2 – A Duel to the Death!
  Jun 12, 2016
• Chapter 1.1 – A whisper in the wind
  Jun 11, 2016
• Chapter 1.0 – Choosing a new home
  Jun 10, 2016
• Prologue – Once Upon a Time
  Jun 10, 2016

Reviews

Community Reviews(7)

• MeteRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  In my opinion, this is a well-written story that emphasizes rational characters and dungeon-building that isn't just ecosystem balance with occasional intruders.
  Style & Grammar: The style and grammar of this novel are about on par with normal published novels. The writing is readable, has proper capitalization and punctuation, and avoids both run-on and clipped sentences. While it could of course benefit from editing, it's decent enough that I can't pick out any places in particular.
  Other people are upset about the paragraph length but, if one believes that a paragraph should develop a single idea, this is the mark of decent, thought-out writing. Shorter paragraphs are more concise and better for action & dialogue-driven stories, but dungeon stories are more about descriptions, ideas, and emotion than action and dialogue.
  Also, while this may be a website born from translations of it, LMS was hardly concise. And, honestly, most of the short paragraphs on this site just come across as bad writing that was jotted off. I'd rather have decently written web novels than shitty light ones.
  Story - Decent quality dungeon building. Because of how the MC was dragged into something at the end of the most recent chapter, it doesn't look like a story where the MC will become OP, nor like one where the dungeon basically just becomes separated from the rest of the world, nor like one where the dungeon becomes an individual - aka non-dungeon - that swears it will start a new academy after it just forms a harem.
  Aka, it's a dungeon story where, hopefully, the outside will matter more than as a source of invading paladins that will be rage-stomped by catwomen.
  Character Score - Decently fleshed out/backgrounded comrades; MC tries to act rationally but also displays emotions. He does act impulsively sometimes - whether due to anger or due to mistaken assumptions. Additionally, his regret when he acts impulsively doesn't always come across as real. This problem tends to be resolved b
• DarkTezzaRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Absolutely Fantastic.
  An exciting new and original take on the dungeon master genre
  very well writen with well fleshed out characters that show real growth.
  I am keenly looking forward to seeing where this story takes us in the future.
  Keep up the good work!
• HarlequinRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Really Like it so far!! Keep doing whatever it is your doing it seems to be working :)
  Found it to be very well thought out so far. Reminds me in a way of the novel series "Chaos Seeds"( having a few RTS elements) except that series always struck me like an avalanche of action (always felt like the pacing was terribly quick, and developments happened too quickly for my taste).
  In "Alistairs Great Startup Dungeon" even though the MC is really impulsive when making decisions, the pacing agrees with me alot better.
  -I do hope events slow down a bit until he gets more of a handle on things.
  -hope he has time to read the information Books that his dungeon has generated instead of leaving all the research to his subordinates and allies.
  Other than that, I have to say I am now a small fan, who is rapidly growing more interested!!
  ~Harlequin
• BookWorm25Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Worth reading.  Minimal grammatical and typo errors.  Well laid out plot and progression.  Fun fight scenes and actual risk (no automatic wins here).
• JohnbonkenRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  So I have really enjoyed reading this story so far, it currently has around 23 posts though it is officially still only on chapter 5.  I do have a few problems with what the author has done which I will explain later, but overall the story is compelling, the description of the actual dungeon is amazing, the world is really well thought out and there are a lot of places that the author can take this story while staying true to his original premise.
  Style-  This is the one thing I think the author needs to change, not because what he has done is wrong, it's just that it doesn't fit the style on Royal Road.  His story reads like a regular novel, the paragraphs are long and wouldn't be out of place in a paperback.  Unfortunately this website is geared toward light novels, which means short paragraphs.  If the author ever decides to publish this story he should keep his style unchanged, but for now it is currently intimidating new readers.  But despite the "flaw" of having paragraphs that are too long, everything else is great.  Characters interact with each other in a believable manner, the dialogue is smooth, and the sentences flow.  The only time I really got caught up was when the author got a little too into explaining the magical theory of how everything works.
  Story- Dungeon stories are hard to write and most authors get them wrong.  A dungeon story is supposed to be about the dungeon, not the adventurers exploring it.  In this story the author set the mechanics of being a dungeon up so that he doesn't need a constant stream of adventurer POVs in order to tell the tale.  The focus is on the dungeon lord and building a powerful dungeon, without turning the MC into some OP character that will never be conquered.  This is one of the best premises I have seen for writing a dungeon tale.
  Grammar- The author has the occasional misspelled word, or slightly more often he will put in a word that is similar but incorrect like faint instead of feint, but those mistakes are t
• Jekke604Royal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Good story
  Exellent grammar
  Original take on the reincarnation as a dungeon concept
  rather unique MC but U liked him
  My advice read the prologue and be amazed at the funny arrogance of our MC
• shangmgRoyal Road

  ★ 0.5

  While the dual realm concept is interesting, the dungeon building in both realms is highly limited. Then the story basically got dropped after the extended beginning part was finished.
  The story basically at one point gets a 180 "twist", and then it just ends - while author includes some rambling about how his story will be based on World War 1 (While so far the MC has managed to literally gather a handfull of followers(Aka dungeon monsters) in his "village").
  In fact it's not a story - it's beginning of a story - without any continuation. Because story has been dropped dead so early - there is no point in spending your time on this.
  Imagine Lord of the Rings, and That the story ends after leaving Tom Bombadill (Yeah a hard one you need to read a book instead just movie to know about what i'm talking)