Alice The Roaming Dungeon (Relaunch in progress.)
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Please note this story is being edited and rewritten. The only new chapters that will be uploaded here will be progress updates. A link to the new fiction page will be posted when the relaunch has started.
The Earth is dying. First came the mana, then the dungeons, and finally the monsters. Conventional weapons proved useless, and slowly, humanity was pushed to the edge of extinction. But humanity quickly realized the power mana held and strived to master it.
As the situation stabilized, humans looked for new ways to reclaim their lost territory. Out of this drive Alice, a homunculus was born from the power of the Dungeon Cores. Being the first of her kind, she was subjected to experiments and training that left her beaten and broken. But the gods may have a use for a broken tool of humanity.
Warning- This is not a pure dungeon story. It is mostly a side piece, and most of the story takes place outside the dungeon. That being said there is still dungeon building mixed in.
Hi everyone this my first story and hope you all in enjoy.
All credit for the cover goes to the original creator here's the linkhttp://bytebeat.net/va-medical-clinic-peoria-il/
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- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2017
- Author
- Puma777
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- 4.0/ 5.0
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- 268
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- 101,026
Chapters(25 total)
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Community Reviews(4)
- LordPurahRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0I love the beginning it builds up realy well.
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I am not promoting I just like it as well
Keep up the good work. - ShinyRockRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0Alice The Roaming Dungeon is a well written story about a girl who's life was compleatly and totaly screwed in ways that would be unspeakable if they were not written about. Charecters are well written, and while I personaly would have taken it in a different direction the author makes it work well enough that I lack anything concrete too complain about. Maybe the MC is given too much? I would like more explanation of the monsters as the concepts themselves are very interesting, but that's just me. Some people have insane protagonists as a 'lol so random' this story is NOT one of those. Honestly I don't think any human who was even remotely sane to start with would continue to be so after what happened... I like this story a lot. There are few errors, the style is sortof weird with the dungon feeling like different continents but eh, Power Overwhelming right? Probably one of the best Dungeon Stories on RRL in terms of being just interesting and enjoyable to read.
- MaromarRoyal Road★★★ 2.5Note: this is an early reveiw, feel free to contact me at a later time for reassesment.
Allow me to begin by saying I’ve become accustomed to less than pristine syntax and grammar when it comes to RRL fiction. There are few to no editors to be found siteside, and the pressure is on to release chapter after chapter at a pace that won’t have one’s work fade into obscurity. As a result, misplaced commas, MIA words, and even the occasional tense shift are expected bumps on the road.
The state of the text in Alice the Roaming Dungeon is dire enough to tip towards illegibility. It goes beyond the usual quality hits sustained here. I thoroughly recommend going back to comb through this with a grammar and style guide. Were this the only issue, I’d recommend the story far and wide in its present form, as the premise is rather interesting. Unfortunately…
Through the entire story, I consistently scratched my head at the unnecessary cruelty and ineptitude displayed by many of the characters. My greatest concern lies in the lap of the antagonistic faction, the UMRD. First, with humanity’s reduced population, I find the propensity to kill off disobedient troops rather disconcerting. They are, after all, well trained yet individually weaker than the forces raised by the two cults. It takes valuable time and resources to train, equip, and project such a force. This is wasted every time another person is sent on an impossible to survive dungeon expedition as punishment. An intra-apocalyptic society can’t afford to waste anything. Simple punishment details or even mind control would be a more logical choice.
As it exists, the formula of government serves to create dissidents rather than evoke loyalty through fear. Sure, the more vocal among them die before they can do anything, but the people who keep their mouths shut and bide their time are in the perfect position to cast off their oppressive conditions. They do have access to serious military training and hardware, after all. If y - A little worldRoyal Road★ 1.0Your summary needs work. On the second sentence, there's a run-on is a sentence. The best advice I can give you is to use the Grammarly app.