Alfegenia-Inline

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Sword Art Online — Familiar of Zero-Crossover

REWRITE-ANOUNCEMENT: NOW THAT I’VE REACHED THE 20 CHAPTER MARK( 150 PAGES), I HOPE TO INCREASE THE QUALITY OF THE CHAPTERS STARTING FROM CHAPTER 1.(ESPECIALLY THE FIRST FEW CHAPTERS WHICH ARE MORE LIKE A FIRST DRAFT) I DON’T KNOW HOW LONG IT WILL TAKE, BUT I WILL BE OPEN TO ANY ADVISE AND SUGGESTIONS FROM ANYONE WHO REALLY ENJOYED READING MY STORY AND ARE WILLING TO MAKE THIS A BETTER STORY THAT WILL BE MORE THAN WORTHY OF YOUR TIME.

(Before reading this fanfiction, I recommend that you watch the anime series “Sword Art Online” and “Familiar of Zero” first if you haven’t already as there will be spoilers.)Regular updates will be on the summer holidays as I’m a student.[Warnings are there for just in case...]

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2018
Author: Hitsiyou-san

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.1/ 5.0
Followers: 88
Views: 84,440

Chapters(22 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

Night_Shade0611Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This really got me going please keep it up! Btw I love your story!
ShenofTheMistsRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
3.5 stars for now, until the prologue os completely done for now.
Small but great start, story really has a lot of potential, and right now it isn't decided whether mc (kirito, obviously😏) will have bodies that ar seperate but will control both, or if it will be like a character selection thingy, where he could switch which character he is using (be SAO, GGO or AFO[?] Body) at one time.
I personally hope he is op, but i know probs most of u all hope he isnt, and though i cant understand why u want a weak character who would get $h!# on, thats u and im me, so yeah.
Though that would basically mean author has to male kirito lvl 1 again for all his characters, and use a lvl system to at least make it reasonable in a logic thinking kind of way. Or author could just freeze lvl if mc was op, just saying🙄.
Edit: not op🙁, no multiple bodies😟, and confusing beginning🤔.....
This story now feels like its gonna become a lit-novel. I dont really know what the LIT genre is, but ones i have read, give out same overall feeling that this novel is giving me. So if u like LIT mc's, tjis just might be it. Of course, only 30 to 40 percent LIT, the rest, idk....
By the new title, i meant i really dont want to update my comments, im not that diligent😅.
As of 3rd chap.
Slight edit: LIT percentage decreased to 10%, but its still good. This 10% is only a prediction on how much LIT will be incorporated into this progressing fiction.
Also, asuna and kirito go there, along with..... :)
I'll redo to make a proper review when.....i guess around 50 (i hope 😶) chapters r out. Then ill review for every 25 chaps after 😏
BlackjakasRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
'Aight I have a fraction of a second to make a good review so here it is!
Style; The style is way too teasing for royal road and look like episodes and not flowing chapter. Way too much POV switch with litle to no action I understand it's the beginning you have to describe exactly what is going on but please, there are ways of doing this with way less text and with it being drawn out.
Grammar; You must have already seen how I write: I'm not english and it's self learned so I've got nothing to say.
Story; This is way too good compared to the rest your skills. Good imagination you got there.
Caracter; You've upgraded a lot the caracter compared to how they were from SAO,GGO and Alfeim but I still find it a bit generic so deal with my pickyness.
Overall this is pretty good compared to the rubish work oncasionaly apearing on this web site the caracter blend well with the story it doesn't feel forced. Maybe a little bit for the last bastard that apeared chap.13 he feels way too much generic for someone who has just been locked into what he believe to be another SAO.
Don't feel bad from my review it's a review so of course I will force my point if you feel that what I said is utter scrap then do whatever you do. Got no time left I'll maybe come back to do a better one when I have the time.