Abyssal Curse [Soul LitRPG]

Self-Published

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Description

All debts are paid. In money, souls, or flesh. With interest.

After a brutal execution, a man’s Soul is torn from his body and dragged down into Shadowreach, the city of endless night, where addiction costs more thanjustyour life.

Thrust into the cursed body of a man named Mitch, he finds himself bound to the Abyss, the realm of endless torment. Reborn with no family, no money, and an impossible debt hanging over his head, Mitch has nothing.

Except for one terrifying Skill—he can store Flesh and Souls.

The Abyss is knocking, and its interest is steep. It's demands? Souls, Flesh, and Credits.

They say no soul can beat the Abyss. Everyone who’s tried has failed.

But Mitch isn’t like the others. For him, pain isn’t the end—it’s the beginning. He’s used to it. And the Abyss has never met someone like him.

Saga Scribe DiscordWhat to expect:- Strong to OP MC- Unique Affliction Skills- LitRPG mixed with Progression Fantasy- No harem, light romantic interest- Exploration of power dynamicsRelease Schedule- Daily while on RS with holidays in there (eat your vegetables)- Monday, Wednesday, Satuday after.TW- Self-harm- Abuse

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: SagaScribe

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.4/ 5.0
Followers: 1,081
Views: 134,509

Chapters(58 total)

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Community Reviews(10)

AnickerchenRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
This is awesome. I am having a lot of fun reading this book! Highly recommended!
Expect a dense atmosphere and dark worldbuilding. The MC is more of the stoic sort, but that is probably to be be expected having died already an all.
There are many secrets to be discovered in this story an I can't wait for the next chapter to be released. Also the Authors Notes at the end of each chapter are highly entertaining :D
CD_HouckRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
When you want to go to the dark deep and fight the worst things known, you go in fast and hard. Mitch's story starts fast on the action and teaches you about the world and connects you to the characters immediately. With a diverse cast of characters where each have unique voices, its a quick read from the start! Mitch has the personality grows and he tries to embrace this new power, wanting to grow it further. Just requires a weeeeeee bit of dept and some soul hungry abilities. A skill helps him overcome his past emotions, and grow to be the power hero we all love. Now part of a crew ready to dive and collect artifacts, we the story starts on a strong promise. He just might be collect a few (thousand) souls along the way to get powerful, or climb out of his dept, and the abyss, that threatens to devour all. This is a reincarnation story too, but we don't know too much about the past about the body of Mitch, beyond he was not a fighter (or was he?!) and was a barback with some good friends. This Mitch though doesn't want to be cowering any more and is ready to fight.
FiddlesoupRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Once again this is not a review swap, and not an advanced review! Saga read my book back in August, and we became friends on Discord. He said he was launching a story, so I figured I'd give it a try, and I'm glad that I did. I could not put it down I binged all ten chapters and let it sit to gather my thoughts. This is really well-written and fun to read. The plot/direction are unique, and I had a lot of fun. The start is also action-packed! I highly recommend this!!
KittyJinglesRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Started reading because this story was on two favorite lists of reviewers I like, and the opening doesn't disappoint. Eerie and mysterious we're thrown right into the action in a fantasy city. The protagonist is a dead barback who wakes as a hot broad shouldered albino, and his body vaguely remembers his dwarf co-worker, ghost boss and hot vampire lady FWB(?). He's trying to figure out his situation and how to pay back the debt he owes for being resurrected into this new life. Good stuff
SRadioactiveRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Disclaimer: I am caught up but I recognize we are just starting out.
Here is what we are getting - stellar prose and dialogue, a solid sense of humor that catches you off guard sometimes (in a great way!) and interesting characters. I absolutely love that our protagonist is a barback. Something about that specifically just makes it come alive for me.
Style is A+, the fic reads flawlessly and the only reason I had to read a sentence twice is because it was so good.
Story A++ how do you take something that exists in such a different world and make it both relatable and big scale like that? I don't know but the author did it.
Grammar is better than mine by miles so.
Characters, the real meat of the story. Love the dialogue AND the internal observations. Mitch is a funny fella. But Mitch didn't budget very well because we are in a HEAP of debt (okay, well, the previous occupant didn't, but how are you supposed to pay it back in THIS economy?) We have best girl who just has so many parts to her. Sable is a treasure and we must protect her at all costs. Then we have our sketchies and our suspected bad guys. I won't spoil anything though but you just don't know if they are going to be good or bad and that's interesting.
I will be updating the review as I go because its difficult to get a true feel for a story this early on but I wanted to make sure that others considering it get a good idea of the gem they are diving into. Give it a read, give it 1-3 chapters to get a feel for it at the least. I know you'll be hooked.
gaidjinnRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Definitely drew me in from the first scene, and the first batch of 5 chapters make a nice, tight little plot loop that propels forward to the next segment.
The setting descriptions are familiar but with a unique spin on them, and tie in well to the MC's internal monologue to help develop the surrounding world. These are kept to the slower-paced sections and out of scene action as well, so we aren't bogged down and breaking tension unnecessarily, and I appreciate that. I like the shifts in time between chapters, as I prefer to arrive at a scene as late as possible. I feel like there are several themes being touched on, but one thread I'm really picking up is breaking the cycle of family trauma (along with student debt interest being devil, amen).
The line that really delivers the premise of the book "I'm sorry. The last guy gave me a note as well..." starts off hilarious and gets really serious and kinda sad by the end of the paragraph, and really sets the stage and mood for what's to come. And as the plot unfolds, we catch glimpses into Mitch/Mischa's past life that directly apply to the scene action, which plays well into the trauma aspect.
I only noticed minor formatting issues and some dialogue syntax errors, but I'm very forgiving of those, as the spelling and grammar are good.
I like the MC and think the author did a great job characterizing him through each of the chapters, but I'm always more interested in side characters so I'll focus on them. I get and like Hathgar immediately through dialogue. His speech has heavy dialect, but it's not used as a crutch, because the content of what he says (euphemisms/sayings) fit in with the speech. The author built mystique around Matilda for a while before we finally meet her, and I liked how he used her room to help characterize her. The Grimmer gang was fun, and Robin took a while to actually meet, which is fitting as he appears the man of mystery. So each character seems well rounded to me and gets their own unique in
or_inn_bjarn-dyrRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Reviewing after the first 10 chapter batch
Before anything else, I'd like to say that the grammar and spelling are free of any obvious errors, punctuation is used correctly, and the writing flows naturally. None of the dialogue so far is disjointed or unnatural and it all reads as if written by an educated native speaker. These are common problems with web novels and some of the biggest complaints I see about otherwise good stories.
Chapter transitions are a little disorienting at the moment, but far less so than seen in some new authors' early publications. The pacing carries on at a good clip without being frenetic and avoids too much exposition. Overall, stylistically, I see only minor issues that are almost always solved as an author settles into the pace of the story.
The main character, Mitchell, seems to be following the meek to assertive/confident character arc. This is influenced by outside factors that will probably be explained in greater depth as the story progresses but it's fair to say that it's a bit sudden in this first part of the story, although not so much as to call it poorly written.
Finally the story itself has a good hook and an interesting take on reincarnation/isekai; the main character is reincarnated into a new body that has everything his old body lacked. This is accompanied with a great deal of debt, not to mention interest. This provides a great deal of motivation for the character to take risks without pushing him too strongly toward any particular path. The story also avoids the overused story beats of the reincarnator struggling to hide his "body snatching" which is good to see as that trope is pretty played out at this point.
Altogether, I'm looking forward to seeing where this story goes and glad to see a new author releasing polished material!
NoTime..Royal Road
★★★★ 4.0
very grimdark and filled with loads of gore and brutality.
Story and character wise it is quite good. Almost a 4.5 star but just slightly lacking behind. I am unsure exactly what this story misses but its just not as engaging and enjoyable as other stories I have rated higher
ShadowTratonRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
So, the protagonist is more complicated than just 'in pain, so hurting', which is great, but this also means he falls under tighter scrutiny than wet paper towel protagonists.
What I mean by this is that although I very much enjoy Mitch for the most part, there are certain problems with the character and the overall pacing.
For one, going from constant pain, never standing up for himself, and even hurting himself because his old world was such a terrible place to defiance just because he has a taller body now is quite the stretch. Especially when this new world is, if anything, worse.
Mitch even goes one step further and expresses his experiences as a strength that he'll use to raise above everyone's expectations.
"They don't know what I've been through. They don't know what I can take."
That's just not something you say about your own trauma. Certainly not mere days later when nothing should have actually changed.
Secondly, his relationship with Sable is simply progressing too fast. They go from strangers to what feels even closer than friends in a matter of days. Not weeks. Not months. Days! Sure, fighting for your lives together makes you bond like nothing else but I, once again, have to play the trauma card. You don't just go from fearing everyone because they might hurt you to absolute trust like that. Mitch literally says, "I think I can trust her," after their first tough fight.
Also, from her perspective it's just about the same. Even if she isn't as scarred as him, you'd still not grow that tight, that fast.
Then there's his actual power progression, which unfortunately went from mysterious and interesting to rather boring. Mitch gets whatever, whenever. There's no planning, nor is it necessary. It's simply one useful ability or item after the other as if lined up for his taking. That might very well be the case actually, but that doesn't make it more interesting regardless.
Negative remarks aside, the grammar is great and so is the worldbuilding. It's a pr
MulBe039Royal Road
★★★ 2.5
There is no other way to describe what this story feels like.
It feels all so dramatic and performative.
Don't misunderstand: I think the prmeise of the story, the world design and the existing characters are actually pretty interesting, but the inner monologue of the MC is not coherent with an actual person but more an accumulation of tropes and hardboiled one-liners a character in an action-movie would say. Dude simply doesn't feel like a real person.
Yes, he has a nebulous tragic background AND this is somewhat treated like a handwavy explanation to explain away some of the less probable character-quirks of the MC. It doesn't really hold up to scrutiny though and does not feel like the character actually comes from this background, and there are insufficient in-universe reasons to explain away the perceived dissonance.
The rapport between MC and generic-female-no1 is also developing on an unrealistic timescale. Where hours pass in the story, it feels more like days or weeks should have passed between the characters to be acting towards each other in the way that they do.
This is also evident in other aspects of the story, where the real amount of time passed is not coherent with the vocabulary used to convey the MCs feelings about things etc.
So I'd generally try to improve pacing.
There is also an issue of show don't tell, but in a more non-traditional sense than most stories suffer from: there aren't any major exposition-dumps, which is good, but some things are simply described as "cruel" "sinister" "sad" etc. without the reader ever actually being shown.
They are all accurate words to describe the ambiance this story is going for, and the breadth of the vocabular is impressive as none of it feels to flowery, but it isn't enough to use these words to describe something to actually make the situation reflect this to the reader. I hope I mamaged to convey what I mean.
Most of the things in this story are individually correct on a technical level, but the mortar