A Terrible Villain And Their Destiny

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They say every hero needs a villain. In the world of Strarth, the Goddess of Heroes, Afa certainly thinks so. Unfortunately she doesn't have either nor is she allowed to bring any to the world of Strarth. Fortunately for her all her superiors are currently asleep and won't be waking up for a couple decades. What's more another strange entity who has the ability to grant her wishes offers her a deal she just can't refuse!

The deal is simple, the strange entity brings to the world of Strarth someone who Afa can mold into a villain and then Afa can summon a few hand picked heroes from this backwards planet called earth. What's not to love?

This is where Bryson Colin Coldwater comes in. Falling from the sky on a cold rainy night an infant Bryson is found in the garden of the Coldwaters. A noble elitist group that is known to rule their land with fear. Throughout Bryson's life his family call him the chosen one, and that their family has been chosen above all others. A perfect upbringing to bring up a egotistical villain.

Unfortunately, for Afa, and fortunately for Bryson, he does not quite develop in the way she wanted him to. Over the course of Bryson's life, he will be in countless different scenarios and situations that are made to turn him into a villain that will be defeated by the heroes in the future. Bryson will unknowingly resolve these conflicts in any other outcome but the one Afa wants.

In this strange game of chess, watch as the world of Strarth's most terrible evil villain faces of against his destiny.

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Information

Status: Ongoing
Year: 2022
Author: CaptainBill

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 145
Views: 234,929

Chapters(225 total)

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Community Reviews(4)

Lecture FillerRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Cool story, fun and easy to read. Doesn't overplay the neccessarry tropes, but it has all of them you would want in this type of story. What made me read through was the suprisingly balanced power scaling of the characters, despite the premise. The mc is powerful and all that, but there are characters stronger than him in different things. Ofc he is the chosen one, with extra juice, but he simply doesn't care enough to be this hyper super world beating child prodigy. Overall i liked it. Now i wait for the academy arc that s been teased for like 400 pages xdd.
SiliconWolfRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
TL;DR: this story has a very generic feel to it. Nothing in it hooks my interest. But if this kind of story is something you can't get enough of, then you will probably enjoy it.
1. This story's style is fine. POVs make sense. Timeline isn't screwed up. Nothing bad to report here.
2. Grammar is a little worse. I'm finding small things to fix in every chapter. Commas, wrong words, etc. The story is readable, but there is editing to be done.
3. Characters are the next weakest part of this story. On the plus side, the characters make sense and act for understandable reasons. But on the minus side, they fail my personal 'cliff' test. If all the characters fell of a cliff and died, would I care? Unfortunately, no.
Some advice I gave another author about their story that may also apply here: if your characters act exactly the same in every chapter, they're not interesting enough. The main character seems to always be grumpy. The maid seems to always be unprofessional. The younger brother is always a dull wit.
4. And then there's the story. Although decently written, this story is very similar to other stories I've read. Plus it also fails the 'cliff' test. I had to force myself to read chapters, and eventually dropped the story.
To the author: I'm impressed by anyone who can write more than 20 chapters in a story. And yes, that's because I can't seem to manage it myself. Even though I'm dropping your story, I encourage you to keep writing!
Verden_NRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
"The maid shouldn’t have been fired, Bryson knew that", - are you sure it's anti-hero story? Up until now he's more good, than "bad". Also, he (as far as I understand) doesn't have his previous life memory, so why does he try to be so good with commoners? It doesn't work like "I have a feeling that it's wrong". For 6 or 7 years he'd been raised as nobel. He would have another way of thinking.
Also the way he let his older brother be a joke to commoners (cake face slap, sword trick, where he looked like clown). And if my gut feeling is right, then he'll probably take that maid back, other than hire a profi. Because author probably won't spent time describing some random maid story.
And know what? It's not fun or interesting. It's cliche. Why hire an incompetent person? Just to show mc is good? His sister (sibling) said maid made mistakes before, yet he don't seem to believe it's true.
The way it felt in the first chapter was: O, mc will wreck chaos to that Goddess and the story would be fun. It's not. Mc is hollow, same with his siblings. The pacing trying to be fast, yet the amount of action (not fights, but actual movement) is small. The concept of this novel was good, but it's not my cup of tea.
spacecowboyRoyal Road
★★★ 2.5
A Terrible Villain and their Destiny reads, from the synopsis and tags, appears to be some form of comedic, anti-hero reincarnation where a god of some kind tries to make the reincarnated character the villain of the story, all while he somehow avoids becoming such. Nothing too wild, certainly, and sounds potentially interesting. However, once one gets into the story itself and it begins to unfold, the premise itself seems to mostly evaporate into thin air.
The lead character at first glance does seem somewhat interesting. After all, he literally falls from the sky into the yard of our 'villainous' family, basically the most powerful Duke in the country this story takes place in. His parents and siblings are described as cold of heart, and it does show in their actions and somewhat stilted dialogue. However, the characters keep this flat presentation, showing little to no growth across the board by and large as the story progresses. Our lead is rude to be kind, so to speak, and across the two or so years covered so far, remains as such. There are signs where there is intent to flesh out the characters more and attempts to further deepen them, but it often falls just shy of doing so, keeping the cast mostly two dimensional and overall rather boring.
The antagonist of the story is, uugh, honestly she is painful. The god is more a caricature of the scheming/plotting god attempting to set up his chessboard, thinking that no matter what things will go their way. Every scene this god comes up in, they are dismissive, dismayed, all while yet thinking they are going to get their way and willing to be all kinds of disgusting and vile to do so. This is the primary drive behind the low character score, there's signs here and there of promise, but the flatness of the characters just sticks around.
Plot wise, there is some intrigue going on, which is always nice to see, but how its handled over to the readers is often in the formula of scene happens, character gets into trouble,