300 Moons Till Disconnect (Gamelit)

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2022

Author

HWPerfidy

• 8: In Which Luck Finds B
  Jun 13, 2022
• 7.5: The Decay
  Jun 12, 2022
• 7: In which Luck visits the Mounds
  Jun 10, 2022
• 6: In Which Luck Inquires
  Jun 4, 2022
• 5: In Which Luck Slays a Lady
  May 29, 2022
• 4.5: Answers
  May 24, 2022
• 4: In Which Luck Herds Redcaps
  May 24, 2022
• 3: In Which Luck Gains Speed
  May 24, 2022
• 2: In Which Luck Meets 3 Guides
  May 24, 2022
• 1: In which Luck Falls Into the Dream
  May 24, 2022
• Prologue
  May 24, 2022

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• cowllumiRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Style: The author writes with the finesse of somebody who's done this before. The prose flows well, but drags slightly in places, which I would attribute to long chapter lengths and not enough spacing between paragraphs. The story also lacks formatting, such as bolding and italics, which help break up large walls of text.
  Story: It's interesting! The MC beats the game he's been speedrunning and finds that there is a post-game sitting behind the main quest that he's never seen before. The MC is then trapped in the game, thinking it's a dream, perhaps mistakenly.
  Grammar: Near-flawless! You wouldn't be able to tell the author isn't a native English speaker.
  Character: The MC shows you a lot of his inner thoughts throughout the story, since this is told in first person, past tense. He comes off as intelligent and a bit of a know-it-all to me, but it's nice to see him using some of that knowledge in the game. Reading about what is supposed to happen vs what is happening adds a bit of mystery!
  Overall: I think this is a hidden gem. The gamified aspects are really well done too! My humble suggestion would be to re-upload this with a title that makes it more obvious this is a Gamelit/LitRPG story (potentially even just putting it in brackets). I might also suggest cutting the chapters in half, or even into thirds, adding a bit more formatting (italicized thoughts, bolded skills and enemy names, etc) and re-uploading it on a twice a day schedule for maximum visibility, before bringing the release schedule down to something more manageable.
  I can't think of anything besides a lack of visibility for why this isn't popping off. It's great!
• CKJ5Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Story 5/5: 300 Moons Til Disconnect is a port fantasy/ Gamelit fiction with an incredible setup to the genre and MC. The premise is the MC, Luck, gets transported to an MMO he has been playing for the last 17 years. The MC is an adult gamer who is very relatable.
  Style 4.5/5: After joining RR, I found myself reading more and more portal fantasies, LitRPGs, and other subgenres that I do not really click with on average. So, my opinion might not be the same as fans of the genres. With all that being said, I enjoyed the pacing and how the information was introduced. This also relates to the MC, a veteran of the game, making him knowledgeable of certain aspects of the world. I thought that was a neat touch. I am not a huge fan of first-person, but this story does it well.
  Grammar 5/5: I thought the grammar was spot on, so bravo to the author.
  Character 5/5: As I mentioned before, I really clicked with the MC because he is an adult gamer who shows flashes of adulting and flashes of getting in touch with his inner child. Some of the supporting characters very not as fleshed out, but I still enjoyed the interactions.
  Overall 5/5: I enjoyed what I read and would suggest this work to people like me who don’t have much experience with the genre.
• Drew RoystonRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  300 Moons Till Disconnect is a classis Gamelit Isekai. The MC is a top tier speed runner of the game, and through a neat twist, they get thrown into the game. Often the problem for me with Gamelit is that it is VR Gamelit which just seems very low stakes. This is not low stakes. The MC is Isekai’d into the game world but he is there, not just playing a game, and there is a question around how he will escape.
  One clever twist to this is that the author introduces a ticking clock early on. In 300 Moons Till Disconnect the MC will just respawn if they die, and they do not feel pain.  You would think that would remove the tension wouldn’t you? Wrong. One clever twist to this is that the author introduces a ticking clock early on. If the MC just wanders about and enjoys the scenery, things are going to go badly for him.
  The other thing that the author does well that so many in this genre fail in, is that they have the MC actually use the knowledge that they have about the game. So often these stories have a legendary player who seems to struggle with the tutorial and then have to learn everything afresh after a couple of chapters (unless they recall something to fix a plot hole). That’s not the case here. The MC is a speed runner and he exploits all the knowledge, loopholes and tricks that he knows from the start. Very satisfying.
  Overall this is a great example of the genre and, if you are a fan of Gamelit it is well worth your time.
  Detailed Scores
  Story Score:  This is really good.  There is a bigger story going on in the background about what is happening to the game (I suspect that the title is a clue). While you get to learn about the MC and the world as he carries out quests, this story is the main event and the author doesn’t let us forget about it in the immediate excitement.
  Style Score: This is a writer that knows what they’re doing. Good vocab, good pacing, good combat scenes. The only thing for me is that it can be a tiny bit exposition heavy at times, but g
• LlamaLlumpsRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  This is moving along quickly and has a nice build up. We have a world stacking brick by brick around us and a deadline in the title, this should be a fast ride.
  We dont get much personality from bad luck yet, but that feels like it is on the way sooner rather than later.
  I am gettng a mashup of Ultima and Dark Souls vibe from the game system. While I am not a souls player I can see the attraction for many.
  Lets see how this shapes up together, shall we?
• Apollo149Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Is life a dream? Are we just in a computer game now? That is how I felt with this story at one point. I am digging what is currently happening in this story. The opening felt like a nice little glimpse of the theme aka can dreams be real? Are we gods in our dreams?
  The first chapter was great. It did a great job introducing a "regular" joe style character. I really enjoyed the details around the epic boss battle. Speaking of which, love that Decay is the name of the boss.
  Also, I enjoy how Rosa is creepy cute. I really loved how she acted in the second chapter. The grammar is solid. I didn't have any problems reading it.
  Only reason I didn't give it a perfect score was I didn't like the length. I struggled with reading it all in one go. The chapters are great, and lots of details. Just wasn't a huge fan of the length.
  Overall, it feels like a good pick if you like the reborn storytelling. Put it on your follow list.
• WetJazzRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  300 Moons Till Disconnect is comfortable to read. This is the kind of story that I could see somebody binging for several hours on end, spacing out a bit, just relaxing. The story reads like an MMORPG Let's Play for the most part, which contributes to that sense of comfort. The chapters are structured in an interesting way, as well: at the beginning of each chapter, for the majority of its length, the protagonist does RPG things. Once the questing is completed, the plot happens in a separate section at the end of the chapter (Occasionally, Rosa or another NPC will stop by the middle of the story to drop some foreshadowing, but this is usually toward the end of a certain quest anyways). It's a system that works for this story.
  In terms of the plot itself, that is where this story really shines. Luck gets Isekai'd into an MMORPG world where he has 300 days to escape and behaves naturally from there.
  The grammar is perfectly fine. There are little mistakes every once in a while, but nothing that causes genuine issues with reading.
  The narrative does spend a lot of time following Luck's internal narrative, which can get old sometimes, but, pacing aside, this story has a distinct and engaging style.
• Banner CaygeonRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  The story is of Luck, an early-thirties guy who had spent the better part of his adult life playing a an online video game that he'd never beat. Then one day decides to beat it despite some ominous warnings from the developers. From there he's transported into the world from the game.
  Style Score: The exposition can be a bit thick at times, but the world is super rich as a result. Every detail of the game/world is laid out for you to feel, smell, and see and this story has a really great ability to transport the reader to it. The author also has these strokes of brilliance scattered througout. These really clever beautiful sentences kind of just show up every now again.
  Grammar: I didn't notice anything out of place, full marks.
  Story Score: The story is fairly straight-forward but it's extremely well crafted.
  Character Score: It's still early days, but I'd love to know more about the MC. Maybe a few more character building scenes to see what kind of person they are. I also love the Non-playable characters which is a really fun way to have and think about characters.
  All in all this is a solid story, with deep rich world building and a shining example of the genre.
• BeverlyyRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  First thing to say about this story is that it approaches a genre that often inhabits many issues on writing sites. This is no exception. It’s written to be a web-novel to cater to the reader's expectations and creates an adventure similar to any other. Where this story differs in terms of ideas is how the MC ends up there, which I admit is quite interesting. It’s nothing mind-blowing, but Bad_Luck seems to be at the hands of the Isekai/MMO suspension of disbelief trope: ending up in a world for literally no reason.
  It’s fine, it works, it’s executed how you would expect. But it’s just so overdone and the lack of reasoning just makes the overall premise feel generic. Adding something more would definitely help, but as of now it’s quite uninspired and feels like every other Isekai/MMO out there.
  But you know what? People will read this. They will likely even eat it up if the author makes some technical changes. The idea itself lies in the same fast-food category you see everywhere on RR, and people will devour it like any other perhaps up to the 500-follower range and then dwindle depending on how unique the story direction gets.
  Anyway, technicalities:
  STYLE - 3.5/5
  The style works in disfavour of the premise in that it is very bloated. There is more information-conveyance than actual narrative activity in the story. For every paragraph dedicated to action, there are two paragraphs dedicated to information, reflection, and filling the reader in on things. All of this is a fancy way of saying the author lacks a filter, and a lot of stuff ends up getting told directly to the reader because the first-person voice almost demands it, in a sort of juvenile way. I’m not saying the writing is juvenile, I’m saying the POV of a supposed 32-year-old man feels more like a 15-year-old than someone with responsibilities, a family, a job, things of that nature. Thus, it results in this voice having to fill in the gaps of the world he has become well accustomed to over the last 17
• Lord SputnikRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  While it only has 4 real chapters as of right now, each one is very long so you still have nearly 20k words to get through.  The concept of the game isn't anything new, a player getting trapped in a game with other players, but it is combined with players from outside of the game that treat it as a game which is a little different.  Kinda reminds me of The Legendary Mechanic.
  The Good:  The author does an excellent job of setting up the game itself without making it a chore to figure out.  The mystery of the Chosen Ones is tantalizing enough to make me wish for more.  The growth aspect of it is not rushed nor is the MC OP.  I personally enjoy it more when I feel like the MC has to learn everything just like everyone else.
  The Bad:  Honestly, nothing much I can really pick on!  The author is not a native English speaker, but it barely shows.  If I had to be super picky, I'd say I would like shorter chapters, but honestly, that's not a huge problem here either.  A minor issue I have is that the MC's race is Kobold, but I feel like he's as tall as a human... and even looks human.  I could be wrong though.
  The Neutral:  I do not think I can give this a truly fair review yet without more content.  Normally, 20k works should be enough to get a good idea about a story, but I feel like this one is barely getting started.  I hope to see more later!
• OrlonDogmannRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Ahhh, I had forgotten how much I enjoy GameLit! It's been a long time sin'ce I read one, specially one of this good quality!
  Style: The prose flows very nicely, and your drawing pieces are just great, so charming too! I have a particular preference for your landscapes to be honest <3 Great work!
  Story: It is not the most original concept, but then again, that's GameLit for you. I do like the perspective of a Speedrunner though, it is always nice to see them find the ways to maximise efficiency, and now having to see Luck apply that in first person perspective? Amazing!
  Grammar: I honestly don't have much to say here, I didn't notice anything that made me stop or stutter mid reading, so! Great job!
  Character: Maybe it's because of the spot we are in right now as I read, but I do not feel much with the rest of the cast. Mostly Rosa and Luck, then again, they are the ones we've seen the most! Only one way to find out...~
  I will continue reading this, and make another Review when I finally reach the end, but for now I didn't want to keep you waiting. This is great!!