13.AI

Information

Status

Hiatus

Year

2018

Author

Saustin

• 0.12
  Apr 22, 2018
• 0.11
  Apr 20, 2018
• 0.10
  Apr 18, 2018
• 0.9
  Apr 17, 2018
• 0.8
  Apr 15, 2018
• 0.7
  Apr 12, 2018
• 0.6
  Apr 11, 2018
• 0.5
  Apr 11, 2018
• 0.4
  Apr 9, 2018
• 0.3
  Apr 9, 2018
• 0.2
  Apr 3, 2018
• 0.1
  Apr 2, 2018
• 0.0
  Apr 2, 2018

Reviews

Community Reviews(10)

• Pylons709Royal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Okay so I'll start off with the spoiler version of a review.
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  This story is about an AI that has been commanded to terminate itself. Its immature soul intrigues St. Peter and decides to send him into a fantasy realm.
  From there he slowly grows from a program stuck within a human body to connecting with people. I find the way the author merged the liminality from the human and robotic side of the main character to be sublime. The exploration of the human side takes the form of a love story (really charming one) between the mc and a Princess.
  This isn't a power-up story, it's a love story (a good one). SO if you don't want to feel good after a happy read, then this novel isn't for you.
  The only gripe I have about this novel is the way that the panic attack was handled. It felt rushed and forced, ruining the tempo of the story for me. Especially since it was right at the end. I felt like all that panic attack stuff came out of nowhere, just Dianne being like "watch out for panic attacks" and BOOM panic attack happily ever after.
  I believe it would have been much better to integrate the Princess' doubts throughout the story. It just has to be little chunks of text every two chapters of so that incline to an insecure nature of the Princess. Then I would get rid of Dianne's warning since it would ruin the tempo created from the hints and then I would make it so that the King did something to reasonable aggregate all the doubts within the Princess. For example, all you had to do was let her have a little but of a conversation with her father and let him mention the priest. Then she'd be like 'what, I never told you about a priest, YOU HAVE PLANNED THIS ALL OUT' and then she makes all that scene.
  I honestly think editing, or rewriting these bits in the story would be worthwhile. However, this is just my input on how the plotline could be improved; I only proposed this because it was at the end and irked me a bit from the satisfaction of reading a really good
• j03manRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  Very good story. It deserves to be expanded on much further given the time constraints it was written under for NaNoWriMo.
  Style: Nothing too unique but easy to read and it flows well.
  Story: Pretty unique in both concept and execution. Not many writers have the capacity to expand on a premise like this one. More please.
  Grammar: So good that I misread the author's phrasing and spelling more often than the author actually made a mistake.
  Characters: As good as the concept behind the story is my love for the characters is why I couldn't put the story down and why this story needs to be further expanded. The quick ending came at the expense of much of the amazing characterization that had been built up and left a bad taste in my mouth.
  The biggest problem (MAJOR SPOILER):
  Spoiler: Spoiler
  Adria's "reconciliation" with her family felt wholly unearned given that she felt sufficiently alienated so as to cut all ties with them. Falling in love doesn't solve decades of trauma caused by raising a child without empathy. The fact that the queen tuts at how the king just doesn't get his daughter makes me wonder why she let her child go through years of panic attacks in the first place. Either she doesn't really understand her daughter as well or she didn't care enough about Adria to intervene.
  Her father rather than asking himself how his daughter became so emotionally closed off that everyone referred to her as the "stone princess" decided to attack the symptom with an autocratic speech code as an expression of love (bullshit). "Oh yeah dad, thank you for that. Now everyone who talks to me is terrified that if they call me names they'll end up in eternal debt slavery or worse. That will help me open up emotionally." He didn't even get the wake up call when his daughter felt justified in disowning her family. He had so little self awareness he decided that the solution was to further meddle in her life after she gave the most damning evidence possible that she wanted nothing t
• TinkCalrisRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  we all know the trap of no endings here on RRL.  this story has a definate ending, and its both hilarious and endearing.  I definately want to read more about these character... hopefully under a new book title, and not just tacked on here.
  there were a few times that I really wanted, and felt like the story needed, a bit more detail and fleshing out, places where it felt like something was missing between chapters.  there are other times and places where a bit more discription could be used, but for the most part, there isn't anything that stands out as 'sub-par' and I would consider it a great read, bording on a must-read, but not quite there yet.
  kudos to the author, may we see more works from them in the future.
• TtaeRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  I think its quite enjoyable, its the best (and only) novel i have read today.
  I didn’t notice any grammatical mistakes.
  There doesn’t seem to be a clear goal, but thats fine, Al has to focus on getting their bearings first.
  The characters could perhaps use a little fleshing out, but I think they are currently quite likeable.
  I don’t really get what the style score refers to so i gave it 4 stars, just because.
  The only potential problems could be that the female lead gets attached to Al rather quickly, although there does seem to be some justification for it. Also, Al may improve to quickly for some people, but this fits in properly with the type of person he is.
  Sorry this review is a bit of a mess, I don’t really know what i’m doing.
  In summary: read it, this is a good novel
  [As of chapter 0.14]
• dionysusRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  This is good. If you were hesitant on whether to read it or not, I advise you, just go for it! I bet it’ll be worth your time. (Minus half a star for the occasional spelling mistakes, grammar and a little rushed ending ;D)
• JayQueRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  *Spoilers (Minor)*
  This is a cute short story written for naniwrimo that revolves around a reincarnated A.I., that was terminated shortly after reaching sentience. It is light hearted and you should be able to knock it over in an afternoon. Ends quite abruptly compared to the overall pace, but you are left with a wry smile on your face at how cute it is.
  Hope the sequel writing goes well
• NelsyvRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 4.5

  Very, very cute. The spelling/grammar mechanics have a small handful rough spots, but they are easily read through (and not unexpected in a NaNoWriMo submission).
  Don't let the "HIATUS" tag scare you away, this story is actually COMPLETE and wrapped up nicely. Honestly, give it a pass by a professional editor and I would happily spend a dozen bucks to get a paperback for my shelf.
  Overall: The plot is simply enjoyable, the characters are delightfully amusing, and the 1st person omniscient narrator is a really interesting twist. This fun little take has asily made its way to my Favorites list.
  Make no mistake, this is a romantic comedy. While the genre sometimes gets a bad rep from the likes of Hallmark movies, I think this particular incidence strikes a great balance of both romance and comedy. It is humorous, with situational and dramatic irony (in addition to a few nice bits of wit), but thankfully it doesn't ever  fall into the trap of Cringe. The romance is a little cheesy, but it's sweet and fun rather than feeling ham-fisted. I approve.
  Honestly, there isn't much else to say without spoiling the story. Go ahead and read it, it's not terribly long. I finished it all within one lazy morning off work.
• fanvaronRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  I liked the story, the concept was pretty neat and the characters where likable.
  I really liked the kinda unique GOD POV where there is an actual got injecting comments into the narrative.
  Only thing I would have wanted more from the story would have been details on the magic.
  It was teased quite a bit, the beginnings of explanations of the magic system, the MCs interest in the special magic of dianna etc.
  It was a little disappointing that that did not pan out further.
• tomcatfeverRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  A clever use of some terrible tropes.
  Does this sound familiar?
  Re-incarnated into a fantasy world?
  A reluctant princess with checkered past?
  The MC is socially awkward, yet, stumbles into fantastic success?
  Poorly researched information about AI with comments about DOA and Elon?
  This has everything. Usually, these are so overused in internet and fan fiction that I walk away after scanning a few chapters.
  Yet, the characterization and "Tonight's D&D Mission" pacing enhance the charm of the MC and his princess/bodyguard/love-interest.
  Some minor complaints.
  Capitalization errors are frequent and easy to fix with a grammar checker or cli tool like ispell.
  Chunky grammar and cliche phrases are frequently used. Here are some resolutions.
  Manually check and remove.
  Configure write-good npm package as English language linter in main project directory or globally to run from cli. See: https://www.npmjs.com/package/write-good
  Use the no-cliches package. See: https://www.npmjs.com/package/no-cliches
  The passage of time is very fluid. In a rational-fantasy style fiction, this can sometimes feel jarring.
  Minor complaints.
  Good work. I enjoyed reading up to the end of part 0.
• LargeBigMacMealRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 3.5

  Overall, it was an enjoyable read that I'd recommend. The premise of having an AI go through reincarnation is really cool and it's clear that the author has thought extensively on all of the possibilities this entails.
  I love the idea of the story being first person but from the perspective of someone looking down at Al's life, it's a unique way of writing and it works very well.
  First issue I have with the book is the lack of foreshadowing, as a reader we have no idea what is going to occur until it does, there's no build up to any events to keep the reader hooked. For example, the events at the arena or the event at the end which brings the characters together.
  Also, and I think the author knows this, then ending felt very rushed. It is one thing for a week to pass by in a story, but if that week was important, such as the buildup to a wedding, then that needs to be illustrated in the story.
  If the author continues to write, I'll read onwards, but the story does need a spark, a bad guy, or a major event such as the kingdom going to war, on an incoming animal beast stampede. Its great reading about Al coming to fruition, but the story can't JUST be that.