Your Mundane Transmigration Into Another World

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Description

My second fiction here, it might be similar to the first, but I will focus on improving consistency as it was not very good.

The idea is to make a completely ordinary isekai story, but make it right - no cliche, some originality etc. I do not yet know where it will go, but it will involve dungeons at some point, transmigraiton, demons, elves, humans, undead.

I will strive for regular updates every friday, but my writing speed is that of a slime (not a native speaker), so I might not deliver every week. Feel free to write what you think, I welcome feedback.

HIATUS - will continue after I am done with my other book, I am unable to write two at the same time. Ii will probably take a lot of time.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: ThousandLeaves

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Rating: 4.8/ 5.0
Followers: 14
Views: 11,772

Chapters(29 total)

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world_wandererRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I would begin with grammar. It is good. Everything is clear. I didn't find any big problems. Grammar here is very good for non-native speaker. I wonder how much time author spent on it. Good job.
Style - it is a solid third narrative. I did not have any problems with it because I ussually read from 3rd perspective. However, I think it can be improved. Author, in my opinion chapters are too long and too much is happening in them. Readers might forget what happened at the start when scenes change at the end. It can be very confusing. Besides, I think there was too much descriptions and lore information that could be delivered naturaly, step by step. Because too many information may result in your readers loosing interest.
Story - idea behind a story is good. I never read a transmigrator story similar to this one, it is very original. Just a single idea of MC's progress through him saving someone is refreshing. Besides, he usually died when he did it, so it also impacted my impression. In short everything about the story seems good for me and I can understand hero's desire to improve himself. However, I think actions happen too fast. For example, I was reading a chapter when he just appeared at the elf village and whosh he is already at the gates of the big city because he died and then another whoosh and he is trying to save himself from demons e.t.c. I think story would only improve if u slow down a bit and make MC learn more about this new for him world. In such way, both characters, exposition and story can improve.
Characters - Well, for me it's the weakest part of this novel. Even though MC is good, other characters suffer from the speed of the story. I felt like they were there just because they needed to be. Besides, constant changes in the exposition after each MC's death also plays a role. In 10 chapters I read MC dies 4 or 5 times and u know it's pretty hard to remember anyone if they don't get enough time to show themselves. U know, sometimes a quality of y