World of vice and virtue

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Memories of the past fade away as light and dark clash. Many different lives weave together to create a tapestry of history in this world of vice and virtue. A few threads stand out slightly, more integral to the masterpiece, then others. Will they be used to create a flowing design or will their threads be cut before there work can be finished.

Lewin Is one of the few survivors of the burning of Evergarden. After living with his uncle the mayor of Grifden he is offered an opportunity to become an adventure by going to the masterwork Academy. But he is not the only person that has importance in this world many different threads we’ve in and out of his story and their own mysterious forces responsible for the death of his father and many others by destroying Evergarden or something big something that will shake the world and thousands of different stories in and a few from other worlds

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Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2024
Author: Voice between worlds

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.8/ 5.0
Followers: 2
Views: 2,523

Chapters(7 total)

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Community Reviews(3)

Emrald blazerRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
I really enjoyed the story so far. The author seems to have a firm idea of the world and the characters in it. As the story gets on the author gets a better sense of humor with their writing adding more jokes that hit more often. The writing style is a little weird sometimes they do really well with how they describe everything and do really good with character voices and I really like how they end in the chapters but in occasionally there are a few weird sentences or paragraphs written in which kind of makes me think that this author is new to the whole process. My biggest complaint would have to be with the grammar, while usually good every once in a there's a misspelled word or just something else. It's not really a big problem and it hasn't kept me from enjoying the story so far but it is something that I hope the author can work on. I'm also a bit of a sucker for stories to have multiple perspectives. While it's pretty hard to do sometimes I really hope the author is able to pull it off. Overall I think it's a fun little story and I hope it keeps growing.
SoaringMoonRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
The content of the story was well paced, and significant progress was made by the characters in the chapters that I read.
As for the style, many paragraphs contain a statement from the character followed by their actions. Despite AI assistance, it does not have an “AI written” feel, and I commend the author for that. My issue with the formatting of the story is that many paragraphs were quite extended. I would like to see those broken down into bite sized chunks.
The story was good with Lewin enjoying his peaceful day, being interrupted by his uncle’s pet to return to the city to see him. It then starts an academy setting which I felt very familiar with, where the adventure starts. It’s hard to get any further than that without spoilers. Easily the best section to grade here.
Grammar wasn’t terrible at all, the only major issue I had was with dialogue not having closing quotes which was persistent throughout the chapters. A pass with some word processing software will clear that right up. But it made it difficult to parse where a character’s dialogue stopped.
All of the characters were introduced well, and have separate emotional archetypes. Though, they are written similarly.
Theora WattersRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
I've read up to the current chapter and so far, I see a fair bit of potential. Stylistically, I think you have a decent idea of the setting and vibe you want. There is a good mix of levity and seriousness and the overall setting has some life to it, but I think you could go into more detail to give the magical aspects of the store more of a unique feel. I personally enjoy the changes in character perspective, but you might want to make them either connect more obviously to Lewin or converge at some point, to make it feel more cohesive.
Story-wise, you seem to have an idea of the major plot and, as mentioned, I think setting up the different perspectives is a good call. The main plot hasn't really come to the surface yet, but we are still very early into things, and you're doing set-up for it.
Grammatically, I think you could do an editorial pass to make the writing flow a bit better. There are various typos and missed punctuation, but I think most of it should be easy to fix. The bones are definitely there.
Character-wise, I think the characters are interesting so far. We've not gotten a ton of time with them to really stand out, but I think the major personality points come through well enough. Like some of the other scores, I think this will become more fleshed-out as the story progresses and a bit of editing is done.
Overall, I think you're doing well. Nothing warrants scrapping, I think most of it just needs gone over a bit to smooth out the flow and tighten the narrative a little.