Winter King: The Path to Singularity (LitRPG, Progression)

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Description

Clay finally entered the prestigious academy that created many heroes to protect humanity. But his talent was revealed to be at D grade, which was the lowest requirement needed to enter. His academy life will be tough.

But at least he has the support of his girlfri— Wait? His girlfriend broke up with him because of his low talent?! What the hell, this is already too much!

Wait, isn’t that a massive, endless, destructive and deadly snowstorm coming at him!?

He struggles through difficulties surrounding him through hurdles and troubles.

Will he find the strength needed to overcome these? What more can happen to Clay in his journey awaiting him and the world!

What to expect?

The story will begin 'peaceful' and friendly, but as the story goes on it will slowly pick up the pace.

The characters in the story are written with their own personalities and are expected to develop in both powers and personality, especially our MC.

Oh yes, the MC is 'kinda' innocent and weak at the start...

Appreciate if you could review, rate and follow!

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2023
Author: Welox

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.0/ 5.0
Followers: 4
Views: 4,287

Chapters(10 total)

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A V DalcourtRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
As requested by the writer, I'm putting feedback in my review.
We're gonna start on the biggest negative and work our way to the positives.
Grammar: I wouldn't say terrible, because I've read worse. I've always said that if I picked up on grammar errors that it must be bad (not the story, just bad grammar) because my grasp of grammar is shaky under the best of circumstances. Here we have not quite spelling errors as such, but flat out wrong words (body instead of boy) which is often caused by rushing the writing (usually because of the excitement the ideas have on the writer and the need to get it out on paper quickly) and then relying on a spellcheck to correct the spelling. The spellcheck did the job, but it's still the wrong word. The writer could spare a moment to actually reread the chapter one word at a time, one sentence at a time, out loud, and they should be able to get most of the wrong words out of the mix.
In general though, there are strange turns of phrases and odd word choices that suggest that either English is not their first language, or they've watched too much badly translated anime to the point where the weird wording has normalized for them. For more young RR readers, I don't think this is a hinderance. It might well add that familiar spice that younger RR readers like.
Style: I get the sense that the writer is rushing the writing. This isn't a bad thing, as getting the first draft on paper quickly is something I wholely advocate. The draw back is that it leads to a somewhat skitsofrenic form of storytelling, where key points are glossed over, repeated, or changed on a whim. The chapters are unfocused, hitting several points with no solid unifying theme. But for a new to writing project, I don't expect a new writer to have incorporated such a technique unless they are well read and well practiced.
On the positive, the pacing is super fast and you can skim read the story and get mostly what's going on. Given that the details have a habit of chan