Wings of Freedom [Completed]

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A world where martial arts and technology thrive together, lives a youth who lost his home to war. When he was still little, he was picked up by a soldier from the Martial Arts Department right after losing his home. Under him, he learns his fighting style and makes a name for himself as a ""Courier"". He may seem cheerful and social but in reality he never lets anyone close to him. How will his cold stature change when he gets a new roommate? "There is nothing worse in this world than aqcuiring a family again just to lose it again." *Mature due to language, not planning on putting in any gore or explicit sex scenes.* If you like the story, let me know in the comments below. This is my first story so let me know if you think that I'm rushing things too much or going a bit too slow. Also whether i turn enough attention to details or interactions. If you have suggestions or concerns about my story, don't be afraid to PM me or just write a comment down below a chapter. Thank you for reading. (This is going to be a 12 chapter tragedy)

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Status: Completed
Year: 2016
Author: Shaon

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Rating: 3.4/ 5.0
Followers: 36
Views: 29,046

Chapters(13 total)

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Community Reviews(2)

Replica1Royal Road
★★★★ 3.5
So far I have enjoyed the progression of the story and the concepts behind the setting are unique enough to be worth waiting for more chapters.. If there is a problem it would be with the periodic grammer mistakes. They are not overbearing by any means but a few of them caught my eye. For example in both chapter 1 and 2 the author used Alex's name for the mc or someone else on 3 seperate occasions. Namely the mc was saying somthing only for him to be called alex who is the adopted fatherish of the mc. Other than these few mistakes which can easily be edited out, I am very pleased with the work done so far and look forward to what will come in the future. 3 and a half stars for current origionality likable characters and potental growth. Not quite four due to minor mistakes that getting a pr whether family, friend, or online could fix. Can't be a five because only finished series have the chance to get that from me but who knows in the future.
RznRoyal Road
★★★★ 3.5
The premise is interesting, but it does not have a real conclusion and almost seems like the opening to a much longer work. On the face, the work has a lot of handwaving of what would all be significant logical problems relating to a teenage transporter and his daily life. Things simply do not make a lot of sense, and the worldbuilding tries to explain the setting but provides nothing in the way of satisfactory answers. This work contains profanity and graphic violence in chapter 8 which is specifically torture. This has a slice of life feel, but it is a bit bleak and detached in spots. I would have liked this to progress and continue into something, but it says 'completed' even though it feels like it was the set up to another piece.