Will You Go: Bite Size WLW in the Distant Future
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Brenn has never found it easy to follow her heart on Aesir occupied Earth where genetically unmodified humans are kept as second class citizens in the countries they'd called their own two centuries before. Life in the Human Districts is hard and painful, and for members of the Resistance, often short. The only escape is the inaccessible stars.She knows following her heart means heartbreak for someone. Most likely herself. But when it comes to Rora, the newest resident at her cousin's inn and pub, her heart is far more insistent. Perhaps her heart isn't the only one.For this story I was challenged to create a slice-of-life story with an implicit setting, strong character voice, and easy to follow plot in under 2k words. It earned me one of 20 writing positions in the Duck Prints Press inaugural anthology: "Add Magic to Taste".
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- Status
- Completed
- Year
- 2021
- Author
- OwlishIntergalactic
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- 4.5/ 5.0
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- 5
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- 610
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- Not_A_HatRoyal Road★★★★★ 4.5This review is brought to you by Luda305's attempt to ensure every 'complete' story has at least one rating.
I guess WLW is 'women love women'?
So I had strong expectations going in, seeing this had passed some critical scrutiny before being posted here, and that was mostly upheld. I can point to some parts and say "I'd have done this differently", but a lot of it is nitpicky and can't really be called objectively better done one way or another.
For example, I'd have put the MC's thoughts in italics in several places to differentiate them from the narration. Is not doing that wrong? No, not really. I just like one way better. And some places had light pronoun ambiguity. That's a pet peeve of mine, though; they were totally understandable, just less smooth than I'd have liked. Bit of a natural hazard when both your characters are the same gender.
All in all it's a neat little story. It even had a touch of thematics - better to have loved and lost - which is more than can be said for most fiction around here. If I had to give one piece of criticism, it would be that the conflict didn't make sense to me until awfully late; the fact that she's in the resistance is hinted at in the first few paragraphs, but I didn't realize what that 'bullet in the head' line meant until she talks about farming information.
It doesn't get five stars because it didn't make me burst into tears or laughter, but it's definitely far above average for this site, and easily enjoyable in it's own right. - RznRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0Without the context of the blurb, the story itself is difficult to be grounded in. The use of various religious elements given the situation is also a bit disorienting and unresolved as the characters seem unimpeded by it. This was good, but it got a bit distracting trying to understand the world and balance it with the characters. It was good, but because of the confusion it was a bit hard to follow and comprehend everything.