When We Get To It
Self-Published
Community Rating
Description
Rick’s niece, Elsie, was born with more magic than anyone is comfortable with. Count Seymour says he can help, but his research is driven by more selfish motives. Her parents just want her to come home.
Rick returns home for the first time in years and finds the house emptier than he expected. When his brother disappears, Rick is entrusted with his young niece's safety. He knows nothing about magic, but history says the elves would be the ones to ask about Elsie's powers. Too bad no one has seen an elf in centuries.
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Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2022
- Author
- GenerallyJoyful
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.0/ 5.0
- Followers
- 1
- Views
- 1,452
Chapters(8 total)
Reviews
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Community Reviews(1)
- Evelyn AdelbergRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0This story feels very bare-bones. There isn’t much in terms of setting or atmospheric descriptions. This impression is further solidified by the fact that any type of conflicts or action sequences are built-up from infodumps. I think starting this story with a prologue, or an extra chapter to explain the relationship of the MC to other focal character of the story would have been helpful.
That being said, it feels like the MC does not have agency of his own, as he is ordered around by his entourage or by circumstances. This kind of protagonist would have worked great in a more slow-paced story. But, with people’s freedom, wellbeing, and lives being at stake, this type of protagonist does not quite get the job done.
Story 4/5
Grammar 5/5
Style 4/5
Character 3/5