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"Any sufficiently advanced technology is indistinguishable from magic."
Someone once said it to me, I've not seen him since then but I'm most certain I'll meet him in the future, be it by my own means or because he's back to this place. In any case, now that I’ve come so long. I'll change this world that is full of crap and only interested in appearances.
In a world of technology, a girl had a chance encounter with a traveler. Once grown up she tries to replicate what she had once seen and thought was magic. Follow Charlotte in search of the true of the world, of the universe as she changes the world she lives in and create a new form of energy, one thought only had room in stories of fantasy and games. Gaining new friendships and enemies in the process.
It's a world of technology more advanced than Earth's, its name is Louvya. The world of Louvya has many countries and three major powers: The United States of Atalasia, The Lurian Alliance and the theocracy of Ethas.
Our protagonist lives in a country that belong to the Lurian Alliance, Gercia. And that's where her adventure beings!
Be warned, the story is slow paced.
Authors note:
On hiatus
Disclaimer! I do not own the cover!
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- Hiatus
- Author
- Vespertian
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- 3.9/ 5.0
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- 166
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Community Reviews(2)
- ZekRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0This story is definitely not for everyone, the MC has almost no personal power of her own so far (getting some hints at this chapter but nothing concrete) and needs to rely pretty heavily on others. Grammer has a few mistakes here and there but nothing dealbreaking, I also find the main character a little naive for someone of her implied intelligence. I'll keep reading and update this review if anything changes.
- IcebirdRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0So far it's interesting, but it really show that english is not the author native language.
There is some typo and grammatical errors, but nothing too awful.
However, there is a lot of style problems, bad or strange sentences, uninteresting descriptions, etc..
Remember, show, don't tell! Instead of bland garment description when a character is introduced, subtly put the details in the action.
I feel there is a strong inspiration from japanese novels, but it's the worst parts of those badly translated novels that appears.
The story itself is interesting so far, even if the action is slow paced, and the "mistery" is a little annoying. Two problems for me: it's not always clear what is going on, it's sometime hard to visualize what you means. And I find the social outings very boring..
The character itself is interesting, if somewhat illogical at times.
This review was prematurely spurred by the following sentence in chapter 12:
"Charlotte arrived earlier thant the other pair so she waited for them to show their faces."
So, one typo ("thant"), and a engrish sentence.. No, nobody "wait to show their faces", it's not an english idiom..
It show the typical style problems this novel have.
However, it's not a deal-breaker, just annoying. I'll continue to read, since the story is still quite enjoyable, and make me want to know what happens next.