Wanting in Paradise

Self-Published

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Description

Mia was a somewhat weird child living in her remote beastmen village with her family. Until one day the human nation invaded on their way to defeat the Demon king. Her village pillaged and herself thrust into slavery she longs for the day she can return to her own little slice of paradise. How will she reclaim what was wrongfully taken from her? Is it even possible? With the odds stacked against her she will certainly try her best, but she might need a few second chances.

Cover art was commissioned by the lovelyitslorelei94

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2021
Author: verachii

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 4.3/ 5.0
Followers: 223
Views: 255,168

Chapters(185 total)

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Community Reviews(6)

Blue09Royal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
I like this story. Its a bit... weeeelll not the most common, but kinda enjoyable. Has some grim elements, but its not to dark (dont like those at all). At the later part of the story (that was written at the time ive read it), there are the 'big guys' introduced that sit behind the scenes and of which the mc had become part of. Honestly? I think the story would have done better without that part and instead kept at the whole 'doomsday scenario', instead it became a level of 'super being behind the scenes' thing.
Hmmm, now that i think about it, i should probably take a star out of the rating, but with RR's bad scoring system, it would be to much of a disservice towards this story. I mean, i DID enjoy it quite a lot, so i dont realy want to downvote it.
James BailyRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
3rd person perspective? Check
Passable Grammar? Check
Adorable child? Check
Magic? Check
Horrible world? Check
Traumatized child? Check
Progressively gaining strength? Check
Slavery? Check
Creepy "Hero"? Check
Main character is murdered? Check
Main character comes back to life with time powers? Check
Ok serious spoilers below.
Family betrayed Mc? Check
Mc's entire tribe betrayed mc because of extenuating circumstances? Check
It doesn't matter because that's still horrible? Check
Basically, since this is a terribly sad book that isn't overly contrived, I'll give it a 9.5/10 (as I have a book I like more than this, but this is still a 10 star book)
softsortRoyal Road
★★★★★ 5.0
Okay this novel is just way too fantastic. And I mean, you know those senerio where you just fund something you don't know you are looking for, this is one of them.
Character 5/5
Story 5/5
Art/telling 10/5
The story starts out featuring a young girl, who has a blue screen ("you know the one"), that she didn't know she has and we'll.... READ FOR YOURSELF
All in VaneRoyal Road
★★★★ 4.0
It is to early to say much about this story, but there are certainly some intriguing pieces falling into place. There is some humor and trope subversion, some world building and some mysteries being set up. So far, the characters aren’t fleshed out properly and the protagonist feels a little flat, but since she is an uneducated minor that can’t read her own status screen and has become enslaved, expecting her to have a lot of drive right from the start might be a bit much. However I would like to get more of an idea of her emotional state and I hope she develops some kind of agency (even limited) soon. At the moment she is more of a chronicler of events rather than a protagonist. Overall, the author definitely knows how to write, grammar and style are fine and the groundwork for a great story is definitely there. I hope it delivers.
Haliya4173Royal Road
★★★ 3.0
I have just caught up. Would have prefered to not have the time shenanigans, felt too unnatural.
I was enjoying John's wish fulfillment story in the perspective of Mia and how she might escape that. Their death at the end of the dungeon is too rushed the introduction of a nuke out of the blue is immersion breaking. I hoped they continued that storyline, the hypocrisy is funny and realistic.
I find the secrets surrounding Mia's village vexing. I would understand if the kids didn't know and the secrets were kept by the adults but apparently they had some idea. I couldn't even think of it as a quirk of the species as it feels like beastmen are just humans with beast parts, and beastkins are just beasts that are human. There is no implied or explicit difference in thinking, behavior, and culture, well aside from appearance.
Anyway hope that we'd meet more isekai heroes soon with different perspective. I would relish the funny moments when cliche meets a somewhat realistic situation.
Also the elders can simply remove those slave collars then put them back? That village better be special or slavery doesn't makes sense at all.
Also the church better not call it a nuke!
BerjRoyal Road
★★ 2.0
There are a lot of things happening in this story that makes no sense at all once you stop to think about it.
MC has lived for about a cumulative number of years up in the thousands, and her skills/titles move back in time with her, at least in theory. At the start of the story, for the amount of time the MC has "lived" she has almost no title or skills. Even with the introduction of a skill stealing artifact it doesn't make sense that she'd lose everything, give the time she's lived for.
Also, MC is a petulant, emotional eight years old with all that entails.
Grammar and sentence structure are horrible. Lack of correct punctuation, typos, words that are "similar" to what they should be, but the author just type it down without checking the actual meaning of the word. Most of the grammar errors could be fixed by pasting the text in gdocs or ms word and letting the autocorrect point out the many basic errors.
Last, things are just too erratic to make sense. MC "goal" is supposedly to stop the church from detonating a nuke, but the story from what I read, is just her making questionable decisions (again, eight years old) and just being annoying.