Waifu Dungeon: Click to Play Now

Self-Published

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Description

Become a waifu. Enter the dungeon. Click here to play now. That is what the popup said. The advertisement had popped up while you had been browsing waifus on your desktop. You really shouldn’t have clicked that popup. Now you are a waifu in the dungeon. Adjusting to your new life, you journey deeper. What lies at the bottom of the dungeon? When the system is insufficient, will you be held back by it or transcend it.

Information

Status: Hiatus
Year: 2022
Author: JustACatGod

Royal Road Stats

Rating: 3.4/ 5.0
Followers: 10
Views: 8,067

Chapters(18 total)

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Community Reviews(1)

JRPseudonymRoyal Road
★★★ 3.0
Style: The biggest issue is the choice of second person. It feels like the story is trying to say "you, yes you reader, are now a waifu!" but that doesen't seem to be the author's intention. Regardless, the 2nd person clashes often with the intention. The style of the story feels incomplete, still taking form. Elements that should develop organically are shoved into the reader's face with no clear origin, details the author thinks is important. To be absolutely fair, these details ARE welcome, it's good to know what color the character's hair and eyes are, it's good to know what the heroine LOOKS like. It's just... the author feels as though they are learning the ropes of how to tell a story in an engaging fashion. The word choice does not blend well, scenes that beg for more detail are rushed through, and other events are lingered over for no obvious reason. That said, the fight scenes are quite good, if you can slip past the choppy sentance structure.
Story: The story is actually A+ material. Good world building, intrigueing setup, some genuinely interesting character bits and several mysteries being set up for the characters to discover and work through.
Grammar: I have real issues with the style, but no words are misplaced, no true issues with the language. The sentances are constructed fine, intellgibilty is not lacking nothing is misspelled, it just... doesn't quite come together.
Character: It's difficult to rate the characters. They do have unique and individual peraonlities, they do come across in the writing, but the 2nd person interaction feels... off. We're not able to 'hear' the main characters thoughts and "our" reaction often feels out of left field because of that.
Summary: Some truely excellent potential here, with the possiblity of a very strong author coming out, but... they're not there just yet. The worldbuilding in partiuclar strikes me a vibrant and imaginative, and more elaboration on that would be welcome.