Visiting an Old One
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Description
Shy and introverted, Dash grew up reserved and few friends. Once meeting Bria and Talyn on his home planets academy, they became his best friends. With more courage and knowledge than he could hope for, the pair consistently managed to pull Dash into adventures he would have otherwise avoided.
Now they have embarked on their bravest quest yet. The trio have borrowed a ship and set their sites on Earth, the home of the Great Old Ones. Imprisoned for all eternity and currently at rest, the fearsome creatures and the small planet are quarantined from the rest of the galaxy.
Humans are to stay put, ignorant and yet safe. Everything else stays away, hoping the beasts stay slumbering.
Dash now stumbles along, trying to feel included as they move to the bottom of the deep blue ocean.
The three find themselves unprepared for what happens next, unaware that their information on Earth isn’t entirely accurate.
Information
- Status
- Hiatus
- Year
- 2019
- Author
- Rudexvirus
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.4/ 5.0
- Followers
- 21
- Views
- 4,617
Chapters(4 total)
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Community Reviews(2)
- M. R. AzeRoyal Road★★★★★ 4.5Should you read it? Yes! Just yes! Stop reading this review and read the story!
Really this is Trending waiting to happen. It just needs some time to progress a bit more. It has a bit of Lovecraftian feel to it, mixed with Sci-Fi. A strangely captivating combination.
Now for the part, you have all been waiting for. The review portion of the review.
Grammar - 5 stars:
Why? It is grammar. It is good. Just accept it.
Style - 4 stars:
Ok, I can say a few words here. It is good. It has a bit of /HFY feel to it at the start, but before you know it, it earns those Horror and Psychological tags. The problem is that it switches back at chapter 3 and it is really clear to see. Might be the change of the point of view. Might be because it is too early in the story. That's why I give it 4 stars. Only time will tell if it earns that perfect 5.
Story - 4.5 stars:
The story grabs you and drags you in. Before you know it, there is no next chapter and you will have to wait for the update. It loses half a star because the story drops a little at Chapter 3. There is too much information crammed in a small space. And that can get a bit confusing.
Characters - 4.5 stars:
Really well done characters! You can understand why they do things. You can understand how they fell, what motivates and so on. You get the idea. My only problem is that both Dash and Bria are a bit at odds with their initial introduction. They feel like a mirrored image of themselves. The best one is Talyn. She feets the initial image created for her. She is the best one to really portray why she acts out of character in the horror portion of the story. As for the others, I will no comment at the moment. It is too early in the story to give a proper judgement.
Overall, this can be considered an early review, because there is not much of the story out yet. I'll update it after a few chapters and by the looks of it, I'll be going for the full 5 stars. Keep up the good work. - ValarionRoyal Road★★★★★ 4.5If you are into sci-fi and ctlulhu (if i'm not misspelled the name) myth, this will be a fine read for you. As i have enjoyed it so far. But there is no physical description fo the trio aliens so far except they are looks the same as human, with no other characteristic except they are breathing with nitrogen (if i'm not wrong). It was maybe there to cover the headache of making a completely new race, but a bit more detailed information for all the characters will be much appreciated....
I will leave the overall at 4.5, might change in the future (if i remember to change it). No major mistakes in words and grammar so far, but this comes from a non-english native speaker. There might be few typos but generally does not obstruct the flow of the story....