Unwanted Abominations

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1962 should’ve been the year where the grave of humanity laid when the bombs fell, yet despite the outcome of nuclear exchange and the drastic after effects it laid onto the planet, humanity still continued on its existence on Earth, but now humanity as whole will be facing a unknown enemy. One that would be considerably unwanted and dangerous at best.November 5, 2023This is fic will also available inWattpadFanfiction.netAnd Archive of Our OwnAnd now here in Royal RoadMight plan to place it in other sites, but for now. It's just these four

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Status
Hiatus
Year
2023
Author
Texan_3317

Tags

FANTASYMAGICTRAGEDYHISTORICALSUPERNATURALROMANCE SUBPLOTMULTIPLE LEAD CHARACTERSPORTAL FANTASY / ISEKAIPOST APOCALYPTICREINCARNATIONWAR AND MILITARYGRIMDARKGENETICALLY ENGINEEREDSTRATEGYPROGRESSIONDYSTOPIAFIRST CONTACT

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2.5/ 5.0
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2
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1,179

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  • PureXXXRoyal Road
    ★★★ 2.5
    I wanted to like this. I really did. The world seems unique enough, A post-apocalyptic U.S. government suffering the results of a nuclear war with the USSR. Then we add sex starved monsters girls invading from another world. I'm a degenerate. You're a degenerate. We all know what we are here for.
    The style is stilted, very "tell don't show". This is only made worse by the poor grammar. The grammar is so bad that it makes the style difficulty to identify. You are stuck wondering if certain prose is done intentionally or if the author was genuinely unsure of the proper way to construct a sentence.
    The characters are a bit bland but no worse than a lot of fiction on this site. The characterization of the military personnel was a bit painful to read through. People were their roles and titles rather than being actual people.
    The thing that ruined this story for me was the grammar. It is absolutely atrocious. The author has some confusion between the use of was/were and between singular and plural. There are missing or misused articles(a/an/the) and some of the worst run on sentences I have ever seen. Sometimes what should be entire paragraphs are just a single sentence tenuously strung together with ands, buts and commas. Here is an example.
    He then turned he’s attention to the beach, and contrary to what the Civil Guard have said to him multiple times in the calls, That multiple bodies have been showing up in shore, but what the agent took mental note ever sense the calls was that they never stated why he needed to be here, but just requested someone to be down as soon as possible, if the Civil Guard hadn’t told what was the issue was then the 16th Division would’ve assumed it was a communist uprising and would act accordingly immediately to swiftly put it down.
    That is a single sentence. It detracts from the story and makes reading through this a chore.
    Overall it is an interesting premise rendered mostly unreadable without significate proofreading.