Unseen Eyes
Self-Published
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Description
Aaron, the pretty boy with his flawless looks and charm; Jason, the internet celebrity known for his daring stunts and millions of followers; Hutch, the tough-as-nails survival expert with years of wilderness experience; and Wade, the ever-reliable cameraman who has never missed a shot. These four friends embarked on a daring adventure to a remote cabin nestled deep within the dense forests of Idaho for a YouTube challenge: surviving for five days without electricity.Little did they know.. there were unseen eyes watching them.
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Information
- Status
- Completed
- Year
- 2024
- Author
- VellinOnTop
Royal Road Stats
- Rating
- 4.5/ 5.0
- Followers
- 1
- Views
- 1,945
Chapters(7 total)
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Community Reviews(2)
- LombiRoyal Road★★★★★ 5.0Style: I think that this is the best thing that the story does, and it should always be like that when it is about a horror story. At first, I thought that this story wouldn´t even be scary, but oh god, how wrong was I. I think that the story in general provides a perfect description of everything, from the first walk from the car to the cabin, to the moment when Jason is murdered.
Grammar: Overall it is good, but there are some moments (almost always before the edits) when there are obvious mistakes. The good part is that that didn´t happen with the last chapter.
Story: The only problem that I see with it is that the fiction itself isn´t long enough to tell us that much explanations of a lot of thing, like what was Jason talking about in the cabin when they discovered that there were 2 bigfoots. The good part of this is that it gives the story itself more mysteries, so I gave it an extra 0.5 star.
Character: I´ve always said it, the little details that we get of the characters are really important, and this story is great at that. Some things like how they each other, their personality traits and how we slowly get to know them are fundamental for a good character building, and the story does that great. - ArthicernRoyal Road★★★★ 4.0As a story this short works fairly well as the sort one would share around a campfire, as it follows a quartet of friends in the woods as they are besieged by a cryptid during a camping trip in the woods. That said, there are a few hiccups here and there such as the introduction of characters half-relying on the information presented in the base synopsis to figure out where things are beginning or a bit of over exaggeration during more action inclined scenes.
Which admittedly is a bit of a weakness to things overall given how with so little space, combined with paragraphs that can be a little dense at time, it feels like sometimes there is too much and too little information provided about a scene and a character's actions. This occasionally results in a misunderstanding of a character during a pivotal moment in establishing them apart from the rest of the main cast.
Underneath these flaws however is a story with a decent amount of potential, more so given some notes shared by the Author, unfortunately its shorter format causes it to stutter in a view places where it could've risen if given some more literary space to flourish. Especially if the writer were to add the details that -as of the time of this review- they were withholding from the reader. Details that completely change the context of what is happening within this story.