Underworld: Masochist

Information

Status

Hiatus

Author

Aarik

Reviews

Community Reviews(3)

• SandsforeverRoyal Road

  ★★★★★ 5.0

  I got sucked in your story grabbed me and I couldn't stop reading...
  I did not notice anything annoying while reading
  Please keep writing
• Jack BlankRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  You're too focused on the protag
  The story is lost on the protag
  You have grammatical issues strewn about the story
  But God damn is it done stylishly.
  I don't like that you're so focused on the protagonist that anything that happens around him seems either rushed or not flushed out enough but I love the intensity you bring to the story sometimes. What you do you did it stylishly but you could use a tool like grammarly or the hemmingway app to help you out with that. Spend some time bringing some spacing to the paragraphs, really let us see and feel what's going on around the protag and even if the story is going to fall away a bit, have it wrap around the goals of the protagonist. I'm confident in saying I'd love to read more and I do want more, but the story has its issues as well.
• ShadowdreamerRoyal Road

  ★★★★ 4.0

  Great work, needs a touch up on grammar and such, I dont mind as I remake it while I read.
  I really like the rawness of the MC, havent read any other book yet with such a brutal MC.
  Waiting for the next chapter ! :D